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AlastorGF
AlastorGFLv11yr
2023-10-21 15:05

Es buena la historia del fanfic es solo mi gusto que no pudo seguir con la historia, lo que no me gusto es que empezó a hacer fuinjutsu con Idioma Ingles lo cual arruina todo, para mi claro esta no se para el resto, lo siguiente ya es cosa muy común elecciones sin sentido por parte del MC no las comento simplemente porque cada uno tiene su propio disgusto con esto me voy no quiero seguir explicando o criticando cuando yo no escribo nada

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amaturewriter
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overall u get what u are promised. something to read. english is dope. mass release of lots of chps is also dope. as for story...more or less follows the authors style. -The world is more or less the MC's playground. everything happens to MC's benifits for ' reasons '. like [ c 20 ]...MC just collected pretty much every clan from kiri with no trouble, nothing. in the starting chps MC becomes the richest person easily, creating seals easily. any troubles and MC faces isnt there. -everything other than MC and his faction is bashed and are presented more less similar to retards. Jiraya, konoha, villages, etc are all idiots. -cannon is changed and yet cannon happens [ just read first paragraph...c 9 - unless changed ]. despite MC changing cannon to the point where kumo is more rich and powerful than other nations. The rikage completely killing thousands of soldiers, stealing clans from kiri and also cause at the start it was mentioned its was AU [ since the grad age was 15 - unless its changed --C4 or C5 ] and yet everything is cannon. The story is not cannon and yet for the benefit of the MC its all cannon at specific moments -the relationships are more or less forced. MC met a chick and within moments fked her and bonded to her to a seal for loyalty. MC is kind and they worship him within less than a day. -some stupid shit happens..........Ie: females are tortured and humiliated [stripped, beaten, dragged to MC more or less naked, etc] but not raped....look i hate rape but this is stupid. I am surprised that after all the shit the chicks went through they weren't raped. Seals that create emotional loyalty and uses em to remove any chance of development of characters relationship and ' character ' . And its contradicting...cause... ------strengthens the feeling of affection and the need to protect the person who is keyed to the seal. Me. But even then, I actually HAD TO make them like or love me for there to be something to be strengthened [ C18 ] [ it literally mindfks em to be loyal ] OR The seal will not change her personality... much. It will however make her adore me. How? Easy, it will dull her memories of Yahiko, Nagato, any friend really, and make her, to simplify the simplification, fall in love with me. [ literally changing the personality- C24, read futher and she is more or less a robot] then theres the MC's personality... I violated her privacy, I violated her mind, and I violated her 'destiny'. I wasn't about to violate her body. No... that will come when she herself asks for it while not under such a confusion. - MC more or less mind fked konan and dosnt want to violate her. I mean its just retarded. MC more or less removed her life, friends/family and he suddenly cares? the only reason for this I guess the amusement have the chick willing fk MC, but whats the point? she a mind slave. Plus as an MC, he seems bland. nothing to make him special or interesting. theres also the fact that Obito and madara not caring even the slightest bit at the kumo nation becoming more and more powerful by each passing yr. Or the fact that none of the other nations react the slightest bit to kumo getting so rich and powerful ------------------ and I dropped half way [C24 ....lost interest ] . overall if u just want something to pass time, this is it. or if u are a fan of the authors work, u'll love it. its more or less smiliar to his other works. also, there are lemons, u like that , its here..I dont know how to rate that shit but its here however, if u are looking to read, it depends. if can stand the MC who toys the world, forced relationship, a world literally filled with idiots and MC who can practically do anything. The MC isnt OP, neither is he a god, its just that the entire world is made to allow MC to anything without any problems. or conflicts, etc. And nothing ' new ' meaning...no new lands or cultures or interesting characters added to the world [ it might be there after C24 but as of yet nothing 'new ' ]. ALos there character..theres nothing to connect? to the reader. no ' real ' purpose the MC has, MC has everything handed to him and is able to do anything. no sense of accomplishment is there. so yah. do what u will with this info --------------- ..40 + properly written chps in one go was dope, regardless of the quality of content .

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