It is a great start. But I don't understand why you put fast pass this early in the novel unless it going to be a medium short novel. If you are going write at least to more than 400 chapter then start the fast pass maybe around chapter 300 or something. But over all it is a good novel to read the system kinda remind of the 'Great Sage' from the anime called Reincarnated into a Slime. Desmond...maybe bit work on the character, I felt that you are forcing him to be closer and were is his abilities as a mafia young master? I was a bit confuse on that part.
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LIKEShark_Bait_2857:Idk what novels youve been reading but most if the ones ive seen all start locking the chapters behind a paywall around chapter 40-60, no matter how long its planned to go
it is alittle early but not by to much around 10 chapters i mean ive seen way worse like chapter 12 lock for over 20 coins a chapter as well as one that locks after the prologue the average is around 40-80 depending on the story and how popular it is ect but the chapters on here doesnt cost too much so i personaly dont mind its a really good story so far
JesusTwist:The author is just greedy as ****
Lucien121:it is alittle early but not by to much around 10 chapters i mean ive seen way worse like chapter 12 lock for over 20 coins a chapter as well as one that locks after the prologue the average is around 40-80 depending on the story and how popular it is ect but the chapters on here doesnt cost too much so i personaly dont mind its a really good story so far
lol try i only know forbidden spells or use forbidden spells locks up at chapter 4 tho as of right now only 32 to 40 somethings chapters are out but still its terrible and this novel isnt that bad honestly at all just 10 early amd who knows if it gets popular enough he may back off some of these locked chapters but honestly its worth it in my opinion its not much and its a really good story in the future deffinatly top 50 if not and he gets lucky and more readers are interested and this is advertised more sooner rather than later i think it has a very.good chance to get in the top 10 in time might take a while tho and to be advertised well while its still technically starting
Master_Celestial:I‘ve seen novels where the wall is at chapter 6 and the Word count is around 1000. That pathetic.
know this is not a romance nor is this a Harlem. But I wonder is he going to get with Diana in the future because I would rather not don’t really think they match as a couple and I personally hate what her moms doing and how she acts only when finding out he’s strong she’s interested. Personally I think it’s disappointing if they get together. Don’t like her as a character nor her mother. Hopefully he regrets her it would be satisfying to see her and her mother’s reaction. Personally I wouldn’t read the rest if they got together
Exactly, I was going to make a review now about it after reading the last chapter, but your review summed up what I was going to say.
Monarchofchaos:know this is not a romance nor is this a Harlem. But I wonder is he going to get with Diana in the future because I would rather not don’t really think they match as a couple and I personally hate what her moms doing and how she acts only when finding out he’s strong she’s interested. Personally I think it’s disappointing if they get together. Don’t like her as a character nor her mother. Hopefully he regrets her it would be satisfying to see her and her mother’s reaction. Personally I wouldn’t read the rest if they got together
Yker_Reky:Exactly, I was going to make a review now about it after reading the last chapter, but your review summed up what I was going to say.