Review Detail of jailrailsession in [Down for Maintenance]

If this was a dish and I was Gordan Ramsey - boy I'd call myself a donkey. Starting off, a smooth first chapter that eases the reader into the setting of the world. Ambience and tone of the book has all been set up within that first chapter, which, a moment I will probably come to recognize as heart wrenching another forty chapters into the book (if i do not call wrongly) follows, the lighthearted, celebratory briefness of the main character's goal being achieved. Six years old seems like an age too young to be worrying about the future, but the matter of maturity in which is probably a constant theme in the book is magnificently portrayed through the quails. It shows the conflict between reality and a tender mind so realistically that, had the scene been written better, would have stayed lodged within my heart. Honestly, I can only resort to being picky now because you know what you're doing and there is simply nothing for me to comment on. Even though this gives me major Kite runner vibes (okay you can call me crass, but the 3rd pov's voice in that book was too good), and forgive me if this is an intended style, I find it really hard to follow the dragged sentences. It may have been partly due to the chunky texts and useless, invisible periods, but sometimes I miss the end of the sentence and end up rereading a couple of times. BUT, I did count the number of words in some sentences and I went up to the 40s. Like I have mentioned, it may just be a writing style, but the sequence of actions come out so encapsulated within a single sentence that it feels more rushed than a brief, proper exposition. Now I'm not gonna sit here and bicker about the length of a sentence, but there is this bold foreshadow at '...scared of him?' Although it is appropriate to fit one in right now, I think it took me out of the vibe. Anyways, I shall refrain myself from rambling further on. Happy writing!