Review Detail of iam_adh in Accidentally Awakened a Prince

The plot for this story is interesting. Using locations that we're familiar with -such as Egypt- and cultures as well, it's easy for me to understand what's going on. However, I do have some suggestions. For example, if you could, perhaps describe the places you have your characters in with a bit more detail. Sometimes I find that I'm confused when reading. Another thing is the grammar. Of course I can understand typos and things, we all make mistakes, but the repeated grammatical errors is something that should be fixed as soon as possible. I noticed that you have the habit of doing this to your dialogue: Stephen brushed his pants off saying" yes, I feel as if we should go to Egypt" A way to fix such a sentence, I suggest you try: Stephen brushed his pants of saying, " Yes, I feel as if we should go to Egypt." Besides these things, I'm very interested in this story and can't wait for more, keep it up author!