The synopsis and title are intriguing, and the story really is something completely different from all the stories in Webnovel. It has a fresh angle, something unexpected, and lots of drama. You can feel the struggles and emotions of the characters. The grammar, as Author said, needs work but it is far better than some novels out there. It is above average and one can understand clearly. In short, you can ignore it and it doesn't really affect your reading pleasure. Now, on with the negatives. Though it is a refreshing take on all the churned out tropes out there, there are a lot of plot holes that nag at me. Things like not wanting artificial insemination as it is too risky and MIL can find out. Heck, I would think as long as she CAN get pregnant, going for IVF is nothing. MIL should be happy enough she is pregnant. But no, MIL is apparently that unreasonable. It has to be a natural conception. Then, instead of IVF for sister, she wants her husband to sleep with her instead as that has higher chance of success? And MIL unlikely to find out? If MIL is that capable, finding out that the girl is barren would be easy, wouldn't it? Not to mention, having an identical twin walking / running about in the same town? Like, no one will figure it out, sooner or later?? Those are just some of the holes that are quite glaring to me. Author does try to explain some away (like the IVF part) but even the explanation is not convincing to me. If you can ignore the plot holes and logic of them, then this novel is worth a read. All the best Author. The story has great potential. P/S Sorry if the above is slightly harsh.
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First, English is not my main language. So I'm glad that my writing is still appropriate and understandable for everyone to read. thank you for your review for my story, This is the longest review and tells me about a few plot holes. indeed I did not explain about FL not wanting to do ivf. maybe I should have explained that she had already done that but it didn't work, to cover up the plot hole. and why MIL disagrees with IVF, actually not because she disagrees but more because she really doesn't like FL, so if she knows the lack of infertility FL, she will definitely make it her weapon to corner the FL. and doing ivf isn't always going to work completely. I've heard of a couple who has tried IVF up to three times and they still not successful. plus I also provide information if FL is sterile. So, the chances of getting pregnant are only 1-5% of success. For your next question, maybe everyone can be like you said, MIL can find out that FL is barren, and they can meet because they are in one city. But, have you ever heard that God determines destiny will not be able to bring them together. even if the two of them were only ten meters apart, if fate said something else, then they wouldn't meet. and in this story, I as a writer who is the creator of it. so I made everything like that to make the drama in this story even more interesting. as you said, you can ignore the plot hole, and not be too real of everything and enjoy reading my story. lastly I am very happy and appreciate the review that you have given. Thank you very much.
Yeah, that explanation about about ivf sounds better. The way it was written at first gave the impression that she doesn't want to try it as MIL wouls find out. That's just weird. And yes, I know there is a lower chance of success with ivf but not zero. I guess I would try ivf first and if fails, then only ***. Your explanation, however, does make her request more believable rather than what was originally stated in the beginning. The strong point of your writing is the way you show the struggles and pain each character goes through with the choices they made. To be honest, I was hesitant to write the criticism because I was worried you might take it the wrong way. Not my intention at all, for I know that writing is hard. All the best, Author.
yeah, the ivf section still lacks an explanation. and it becomes a plot hole. I purposely show the struggles and sufferings of each character, because all actions will be rewarded. also that way readers will find it difficult to support which party. no, I'm not offended. I'm glad someone left a review like you did. Moreover, you use good language and not only show the shortcomings but also the strengths of my story. so, feel free to comment or review.
