Review Detail of Noleafyet in PENANCE - The Prologue

Interesting style of world-building. I see potential in this novel. A little trimming and polishing can make this a real goody. Hmnn, where can I help.. I humbly suggest controlling the pacing a little. Please introduce us to the characters more. As a reader, I want to know more about them especially the MC. It will also make this novel shine more. Keep it up. I'll save it in my library to binge later.