Review Detail of Jayden_orgin in The Dawn of the New World

Not gonna lie, reading "Have a lot to say" followed by "only 7 chapters in" got me curious enough to give the review a once over. 1. There are approximately 12,000 words in the first seven chapters combined. I dare you to find me even 12 grammatical mistakes in there. Although I do agree (TO AN EXTENT) about the sentence flow, that's not under my control. The novel is posted through a 3rd party site from where a bot posts on inkstone from where it is posted here. And somewhere along the line the paragraphs get mixed up. Despite my best efforts, I have no control over it for the most part. 3. I genuinely have no idea what in gods name you're talking about here. What part of his backstory does not make sense? The fact that he was born? Or that he was mistreated afterward? You read one SPECK of information and your little brain overheats. Do you want to be spoonfed everything from the beginning? Well, good thing you stopped reading because I don't like hand-holding children. If you can't connect the dots then you really shouldn't be reading this because it only gets darker. 4. So I'm a little confused here. You are talking about the weapon and then switch to character development a second later in the same point. But unlike you, I can distinguish the two so let me explain. A) The weapon is SAID to be overpowered in its 'brochure' because that's what all marketing is. Does he get it? No. Does he know how to magically use it? No. It has a whole list of requirements to fulfill beforehand and you say it's overpowered and unbalanced. HOW BISH?! B) YOU'RE 7 CHAPTERS IN! There is NO character development yet. What are you on about?? You're freaking lucky WN doesn't let me curse otherwise I'd color your mangy little brain a whole new color for making me even write this.