Review Detail of night_sea in My Little Mate

I’m trying my best to give this book a shot. While the premise behind the book is promising, I find it very uncomfortable when the characters keep mentioning how hot the child will be when she grows up. Also grammer is a killer and the story has an overall chucky feel. Paragraphs dont flow very well and the narrative jerks around from one plot point to the next. I am curious to see how the plot progresses, but I will be taking many breaks so the writing style doesnt rot my brain.