Review Detail of BunchaCrunch in The Beautiful and the Damned

The characters are cool but I didn't experience much development in them. The story itself progressed fine, something would continually be happening. My biggest issue was the writing quality - repetition, punctuation, grammatical issues and lack of flow. Everytime someone talked they also did something so all the conversations felt so drawn out and I ended up skipping through chapters and growing uninterested. I appreciate the personality of the narrator but it's quite rough.