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Pork
PorkLv124yr
2020-09-13 11:29

he was introduced as billions of years old, cold aloof god. but he talks way to much, and speaks many unnecessary things, 15 chapters in his 'cold' charecter is already breaking, and the story is already progressing to fast, I would be surprised is the emperor of the kingdom came down next chapter. two peerless beauties were generated out of no where,, just cause no doubt for smut reason which also brings the story down a bit. but the main problems as I said are. cold personality breaking, story moving way too quickly, and too much unessarcary speech on the mcs part. oh and too many random long drawn out info dumps.

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SavageGamer
SavageGamerLv14

man what everytime authors introduce cool cold charachters they have to change their personality.Had to drop supreme magus for this Reason as well After wasting My time for like 80 chapters smh .

Chaoticmike
ChaoticmikeLv14

That novel has like at least 1-200 chapters in just its academy arc stage but the ending of that arc was worth the wait.

SavageGamer:man what everytime authors introduce cool cold charachters they have to change their personality.Had to drop supreme magus for this Reason as well After wasting My time for like 80 chapters smh .
DaoistPaleSnow
DaoistPaleSnowLv3

well if u like aloof mc go check Gourmet in another world lol just like this novel but instead he cooks and he has a 10-something ranked dog instead of cat

DaoistPaleSnow
DaoistPaleSnowLv3

oh forgot to add he is aloof and barely smiles he is expressionless most of the time

The_Odyssean
The_OdysseanLv5

a little smut or r18 doesnt bring a story down

EroticEarwig
EroticEarwigLv13

I've found its best for us readers sanity to completely ignore any backstory of mc's, especially if they're some peerless expert or "hyper-intelligent" character that acts and has the ability of a mediocre 14 year old **** who suddenly developed magical powers. Or a "worlds greatest and most experienced mercenary" who has no common sense and is extremely naive.

Pork
PorkLv12

nope but you literally create two woman out of thin air which just so happen to be unimaginably beautiful women that impress a man who claims to have seen every woman possible in his very long life, you brings a story down cause it shows you are a half arsed writer who cant even be bothered to make a decent lead female character.

The_Odyssean:a little smut or r18 doesnt bring a story down
Shark_Bait_2857
Shark_Bait_2857Lv13

Ove read close to 800 chapters but im too tired of the repeated “im crazy and she is too” between lith and solus, and it shocks me every time i see both of them act so insecure in literally every little thing Its cool to give characters flaws but giving then debilitating mental illnesses is just too much man

Chaoticmike:That novel has like at least 1-200 chapters in just its academy arc stage but the ending of that arc was worth the wait.
BondageMaster
BondageMasterLv1

sometimes authors write it so bad or repeat it so much that it becomes impossible to ignore.

EroticEarwig:I've found its best for us readers sanity to completely ignore any backstory of mc's, especially if they're some peerless expert or "hyper-intelligent" character that acts and has the ability of a mediocre 14 year old **** who suddenly developed magical powers. Or a "worlds greatest and most experienced mercenary" who has no common sense and is extremely naive.
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Reighlyyy
ReighlyyyLv13

I love this novel, for some reason I feel at ease when I'm reading, it's a really strange feeling but when I read this novel all the stress or everything that I can usually feel in other LN isn't present, it's just calming and I want to congratulate and thank the author for this. Well, let's speak about the novel itself, first there aren't that many if any fault in the language. The way the author use the words is very pleasing and not repetitve. The phrasing is good and I must say that it is more and more difficult to find novel with this quality. Then about the updating stability, as you can see, the author is uploading 14 chapters / week, which is why I think he deserves 5 stars. The chapters are not that long but the writing quality make me feel that the author spend much time working on his novel. The world background is especially good here, we have some lead about the origin of the system but not all the fact, the world is structured, there is no incoherence and everything is clear, well thought, and nit over exaggerated. The universe described is plausible. And all of this lead to a good story development. Some might think that the author is too quick with the beginning but I think that it is a strength of this novel, it skipped the boring part and always show what is really interesting (I won't hide the fact that I would enjoy if the author decided to spend a little bit more time on each part because I really enjoy reading). If the author can continue this speed or slow down a little bit it would be perfect I think. The story itself is well built, it's coherent, the goal of the MC is clear and logic and ghe way he acts and how the story evolve is at the same time a little bit obvious (if you spent the last few years reading novels you will be able to see what's coming in the few next chapters) but also surprising (the way the author make the MC acts is different but coherent, logic and intelligent). And the good world background and story development is completed by the characters, the MC and first plan characters are all interesting and I hope they can progress along the MC so that they are not forgotten like in a lot of novel because each of them has a personality which is really cool. The MC development is particularly good, he is not oblivious and his stubbornness is justified but it doesn't stop him from evolving and developing feelings. The second plan character are less developed (which is logic) but they are not stupid or boring, they blend perfectly in the story. As for the characters that only appear occasionally they are qualified by something that make you recognize them even after long time not seeing them and they add rythm and consistency to the story. For the characters that only appeared once they are either here to make the story progress or for the comic relief. All in all a rare jewel on this app, worth reading, worth following. I would like to congrat and thank the author for this story. Keep up the good work, it's really good.

RestingTree
RestingTreeLv4

Stating my review as of C51, I held the top Non-Author review on the original so please read the whole review. I would check on it daily till it finally was removed by the author himself. It was a great book that I rated 4.5 Stars for having great Writing Quality, Stable updates, Good Character Design, the only issue was the lacking story development which was due to low chapter count, and lower world background due to the main character as of then not expanding his horizons past 3 places, all described and imaginable through context, just a lack of world knowledge. This story has, in my opinion, different from the original too much for it to be considered a replacement. The Writing Quality is lower, at 3.5 stars, but I rounded to 4 due to the rating system in place. The author can't seem to stay on topic and butts in the story to explain things that need no explanation, and could if was a good author, be explained in dialogue or thought. For example, the heart cultivation system, they deviate for a minute to explain the heart cultivation system, how it's based on the soul and therefore one of the hardest things in the cultivation world to raise, and how only the 3 top immortal emperors have reached its peak. He can think back on his death while cultivating in his store, " I could have caught up to him and beat him if I had raised my heart cultivation to Heart Void... I'm still stuck at Heart unmoving mountain, I may have had a glimpse into it previously but my cultivation now is simply too low ", and the two earlier realms explained which he teaches his future disciple. The stability of Updates is fine, I give it 5 stars. Story Development is butchered, the original was much more of a casual yet satisfying read and had you interested in the side-characters, this is my main point of critique and the one I hope my comment readers sit up from there seats to read. The Side-Characters in the original you would learn about more, they would attempt to talk with the store owner and the store owner would be unresponsive, giving nods or a smile, they would say a qualm they had which silently built the depth of the world, they would talk with each other, you would see the bandits leaning to each other and appreciating seniority and looking up to there boss even in the presence of a 9-saint. In this it feels like their props, put there to show off the MC, this ruins the original novels likeness and lowers it to be just another novel on the board, making it nothing special to read, just another interesting title with a forgettable narrative. I would normally give it a 3, but due to remembering the original, I must give it a 2. Character design is also a 2, the main character is given no prior explanation like in the original, you learn from the context in chapter 2 or 3 that he was transmigrated, but then he talks about how he used to be a top expert if I hadn't read the original I don't think I would've understood the situation immediately. As previously said the characters have become props to show his greatness, and are no longer interesting, the two girls have no personalities, there just prizes unwarranted for the main character to show off to his customers, who he never talks to and shows no appreciation nor affection towards. World Background, this was a complaint I had for the previous author as well so I can't be too harsh in reality, luckily though we're on the internet and I can be hypocritical in my choices. If I remember correctly I gave the previous author 4 stars for world background because he at least depicted the environments and I could imagine them, but now, it's a small shop in some area is some kingdom with a history we know little about and can only correlate to the very simple and unbuilt world history (which this world history is new and was not mentioned in any of the originals chapters, I do not know why the empire is suddenly founded by a long-dead hero who fought in this great war that would be unimportant if it followed the likeness of the original). We don't get to imagine the interesting black wasteland like in the last book with a quaint village on its bordering coast that live off the sea and cultivators explore the deadlands for rare ingredients, where our MC meets up with the two best cooks on the continent or at least proclaimed by there elder, who is acknowledge as the best cook on the continent, who then follow after to find our MC cause he shows off his cooking skills without even knowing. World building is 1 star. Is this all just me complaining about how it isn't faithful to the original? Yes. Is that bad? To most no. But to me, this author could always just write his own book, sense he clearly has concepts for them by introducing this random world history with a great war. But instead, he tried his hands at reviving a very great book in my eyes and turned it into a second-rate book, and now no one else can ever read that original book, even if it would've never been completed, it was a good short run that left you with an idea in your head, one that could let you imagine that world and the character's future just in your mind, without needing to continue it. If this is the same author who just didn't like his old book and made a new account saying that he transferred rights, then you have made a downgrade, and if it's a different person who has taken the reigns of this, you have removed a great book from this site, and no one will be ever to read that original again. If I could rate this anything, personally id rate it 1 compared to the previous, but on its own, 3.5-4 , but I acknowledge it will never be what the previous was, but I can not forget the previous so in the end I will leave it with 2.8.

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