đ„Good start đ„ Love the concept and love the dynamic between the three of them. They arenât super mega overpowered so we can expect them to battle all three together against bosses (example: all 3 vs Nomu in the first accident. Maybe they worded on their teamwork and author can showcase it in that fight) Canât wait to see how youâre gonna tackle the romance aspect (pls donât spoil us on the pairings) The grammar is good, lenght of chapters is reasonable, update ... (well itâs the first day but I hope that the author will update from time to time as long as the story isnât dropped) All in all, itâs a good start and a promising story. đđ»Advices for author (if you donât mind): - make some special chapters every now and then like Side stories and chapters focused only on itachi and obito (since Madara is the main mc). This could be good for their own little adventures and especially the romance. After all they are three guys from earth so itâll be intersting to see the different ships (also it will be a goof Thing to do for the internships since I assume that they wonât go to the same one) - again, thereâs three of them and they all have the sharigan and about the same skillset (taijustsu/genjutsu/fire affinity) so maybe have them fight together. Maybe make them ag the lvl of the Big 3 on their own but when they are together they are as strkng as nomu. - we already read the manga or watched the anime so show us some different stuff besides only canon (some interactions with other characters or just some moments between then and their family) - even if Madara is the main mc, the other 2 are no different than him so there should be no reason for them to be side characters. What I mean by that is that they should have their own stories and not just follow madara (even if itâs not written. At least just mention what they are doing and there are not there to exist just to highlight madaraâs existence. They have all the same wish) - Have fun writing this and donât hesitate to take breaks when you donât have inspiration (if you force yourself to write when youâre not in the mood or donât have ideas, them the story will become bland and it will be hard to correct it in the future)
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LIKEDaoistShinobi:Wow! I wIll definitely Do my best to meet everyones expectations. Thank you so much for the advice and all the kind words. I really appreciate it. I will definetly keep that all in mind!