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đŸ”„Good start đŸ”„ Love the concept and love the dynamic between the three of them. They aren’t super mega overpowered so we can expect them to battle all three together against bosses (example: all 3 vs Nomu in the first accident. Maybe they worded on their teamwork and author can showcase it in that fight) Can’t wait to see how you’re gonna tackle the romance aspect (pls don’t spoil us on the pairings) The grammar is good, lenght of chapters is reasonable, update ... (well it’s the first day but I hope that the author will update from time to time as long as the story isn’t dropped) All in all, it’s a good start and a promising story. đŸ‘‰đŸ»Advices for author (if you don’t mind): - make some special chapters every now and then like Side stories and chapters focused only on itachi and obito (since Madara is the main mc). This could be good for their own little adventures and especially the romance. After all they are three guys from earth so it’ll be intersting to see the different ships (also it will be a goof Thing to do for the internships since I assume that they won’t go to the same one) - again, there’s three of them and they all have the sharigan and about the same skillset (taijustsu/genjutsu/fire affinity) so maybe have them fight together. Maybe make them ag the lvl of the Big 3 on their own but when they are together they are as strkng as nomu. - we already read the manga or watched the anime so show us some different stuff besides only canon (some interactions with other characters or just some moments between then and their family) - even if Madara is the main mc, the other 2 are no different than him so there should be no reason for them to be side characters. What I mean by that is that they should have their own stories and not just follow madara (even if it’s not written. At least just mention what they are doing and there are not there to exist just to highlight madara’s existence. They have all the same wish) - Have fun writing this and don’t hesitate to take breaks when you don’t have inspiration (if you force yourself to write when you’re not in the mood or don’t have ideas, them the story will become bland and it will be hard to correct it in the future)

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The Uchiha's in MHA (AU)

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DaoistShinobi
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Wow! I wIll definitely Do my best to meet everyones expectations. Thank you so much for the advice and all the kind words. I really appreciate it. I will definetly keep that all in mind!

Lordrim
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is this dropped?

DaoistShinobi:Wow! I wIll definitely Do my best to meet everyones expectations. Thank you so much for the advice and all the kind words. I really appreciate it. I will definetly keep that all in mind!
DaoistShinobi
DaoistShinobiAuthorDaoistShinobi

Definitely

Lordrim:is this dropped?