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2021-09-08 12:11

I have zero complaints for the Writing Quality they uses various words to describe a topic subject or the story in general. Unfortunately this story suffers in it's Update Stability as even when it was not on hiatus the author seemed to upload a chapter every month or so this can be excused for the quality of the chapters and the effort put into them. Story Development is relatively basic but that's what you'd expect from a fanfic on the plus side though it seems to have a tiny twist compared to the usual trope. Character Design is more complicated than I thought it would be the mc displays regret and contemplates past actions and events, though the females characters are limited due to the mc's 'attractiveness' they still have relatively a reasonable thought process. You can't judge the World Background much since it is a fanfic so I'm grading this based on how he presented the world so to say and I would like to think he did a good job though you would need to know about the world in advance to understand some of it. 4.2/5 Overall Review: No complaints for the Writing Quality poor Update Stability and decent Story Development and passable Character Design and good World Background. Note to the Author: This has potential my suggestion to make it better is to make whatever you want but have a plan in mind for the mc it doesn't even have to be a plan it can just be an end goal and you will probably feel like writing will become much easier, make sure not to rush it though if you put some more care into it and be more frequent with updates than I can imagine you in the top 10. *This has multiple spelling mistakes. Please don't take my words too seriously I'm not qualified to review or rate your fanfic this is just my personal opinion.

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