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2020-10-16 10:28

I am going to be honest, because author deserves it. The storyline and plot is food. Love the title but more work may b needed on your cover to make it catchy. Writing quality is good, just some typos which we almost all have as authors. Story developed quick and author has good descriptive writing. My only complain would be for author to cut down on d large chunk of text and also give some detailed description of the scenes... For example how she escaped when the man was distracted and all, where were the kids... Try a bit if show and not tell. All in all, it isn't easy to come up with a plot and write something down. Good one dear, don't give up on your story. Keep writing, read other author's books and learn a thing or two... Its how I improved. If u are on discord, msg me @BaeVida#7167

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