Review Detail of RJMidnight in tgbicc

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RJMidnightLv33yrRJMidnight

The story is not bad but still needs some work done. One: There are some grammar mistakes that, if you reread the story, they can be fixed. Second: The first chapter, you used “he” a lot that i was lost a bit and had to reread again. If you don’t want to introduce the MC’s name in the first chapter to create mystery, you can use the boy, a characteristic trait, the person, the figure, etc. Still use “he” but other stuff with it. Third and Last: Break up your paragraphs. Sorry if I came off rude, I didn’t mean too. You are doing good, the pacing is well, keep going and keep improving, I see potential in this story!

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PureBlood404

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PureBlood404AuthorPureBlood404

for the first one, i am sorry, English isn't my native language and I have a lot to learn. the second one, I edited it and I think it's better now third one, yeah I will try, I mean I think it doesn't give the impact it gives if I break the paragraph, I will try in upcoming chapters don't worry you aren't rude, and thank you for your constructive criticism it helps me a lot

3yr

RJMidnightLv3RJMidnight

You’re welcome. And have you tried Grammarly? It will help you with writing your story. (Sometimes Grammarly doesnt catch everything so use the site then put it in google docs(or word) to check it further. Oh, and grammarly only works on desktops and laptops).

3yr