Review Detail of Kadish in MARVEL: Killswitch's Origin

tl:dr the author needs lots of practice, outlining, and proof reading beyond spell check. in a word, the story feels "discombobulated". the following are personal observations, not personal attacks. it can be used to improve what ive read so far in this fan fiction. everythings feels slapped together, without proper setup, and is lacking in almost ever catagory. It lacks both explanation and basic lead up for almost everything, causing the whole book to feel disjointed and its like im reading a fever dream. there are too many crossovers dumped on you, and it does it almost all at once magnifying the confusion. Its almost a collection of thoughts rather than a fan fiction designed for consumption, as if the author has an unorganized story in his head, and also has difficulty putting it coherently into words on a paper. dont give up on writing, but always move forward with plans to improve.