(I'm not very good at giving opinions, thus there might be repeated sentences and words, rewritten with a different wording) I won't deny, this work is interesting, but that's all. I understand that it's necessary to have a good basis for the story to develop itself in the way the author wanted, so even if it gets boring, I won't complain about the 50-60 chapters needed for this work to finally focus on Broly. But after these 60, it seems as if it got more boring. I have read the recent chapters and most of them after 60 are nothing but information getting thrown all over the place. Some were about future enemies, others about Broly's training and of how much of a genius he is (which everyone already knows and it's unecessary for Yami to talk about it every single training), and even Broly's actions. It's annoying to see him getting treated as a kid, even though he's over 18. I comprehend that for most races that last for a long time that's normal, but with Broly's attitude and ingenuity, along with the lack of courage to take decisions on his own, it gets very frustrating to accompany this work. Broly hardly takes any decisions on his own (If I recall correctly). Something else that's bothering me, are the psychological openings that Broly has, even though they have already said that he's pure-hearted and all that stuff, he's way too easy to manipulate and it annoys me, he even got manipulated twice, if not more. Even though it's simple, it's annoying. I honestly would prefer more a "Berserk" type of main character, like the OG Broly or Yami himself, more than this current Broly. You beat around the bush too much, and that doesn't help a lot either.
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I understand what you mean and I wanted to keep Broly that way on purpose, so that it was more satisfying down the line when Broly finally gets a hold of himself and behaves the way everyone wants him to. Broly especially due to how strong he is, has very few flaws, so I had to stress his naivety and pure heart to give him a weakness. What if I told you that later down the line, I planned a big fight between Broly and Yami where all of this build up finally bubbles over and becomes so much stronger physically and emotionally because of it? I really appreciate that you still have me 4 stars though In honestly I know that my writing style is more than a bit convoluted, it's a problem I have with my speech as well but I hoped you enjoyed anyway
Also forgot to say Broly at this point of the story is 17, you have read the latest chapters were Broly curses back at Yami right? I thought that would make up for it a little bit
Sorry for my haphazard commenting style but again I have to ask you Can you please be a little more clear on what you mean by post 60 Information is getting thrown all over? I tried my best to advance the plot while balancing action and comedy. I'm not quite sure where you are talking about
In certain chapters after 60, trainings and explanations start to be made. I don't find this wrong in any way, but in my point of view, many explanations and information you give are unnecessary. I know and can understand that the information about the character, abilities and even the backstory are essential for the story to go on while still being solid, but even so, sometimes it gets depressing to get so many explanations about all that stuff. This might be a personal opinion that only I have, so it's not much of a problem. As far as I've seen, I'm the only (or at least one of the few) one who has complained this much about the explanations, so it's not big enough of a problem that it might affect the entire work.
The work has its own interesting moments and it's not something bad, I'll keep following the work and wait to see what it has to offer in the future. Obviously, if what you told me actually happens, it would just heighten my will to keep reading the work to see it happening. But in the end, with or without that happening, I'm still reading the work. I personally find it interesting and with great potential as long as it's correctly developed. (One of the main reasons why I gave 4 stars, every other vote options were maxed, the only one below average was about the main character himself.)
That is extremely valuable information Thank you very much While not wanting it to be hostile, I've wanted criticism about my work for a while I'll work on that Thank you very much for pointing this out
