Review Detail of Aislinn_Jasper in An unexpected adventure

The story plot is nice I would recommend people to read it. I really liked how your chapters aren't lengthy at all and can be read in one go. There are some problems with punctuation and grammar but can always be corrected. Also, I would like to advise you to make you're writing style a bit catchy and interesting as it is the most important in writing a novel. You have potential and you surely can do much better in the future. Keep writing and improving. All the best for upcoming chapters :)