The overall writing style is interesting . The writer has built the characters well and even connected the story well. keep up the good work. waiting for more chapters [img=recommend][img=recommend]

You've got a solid start with your two chapters, the story line is interesting and could be develop into something great. But, some sentences in your story need paraphrasing. and also even though editing can be time consuming, I hope you've taken time to edit your work. Great job! Continue updating.

The story starts fine I guess, though there's that lacking element which just can't keep my interest. Also, grammar can still be improved through it is understandable.

First off, I'm quite picky about stories with romance as their main theme, so here's my honest review: Points to consider: -Grammar: Although it is readable, it still has many issues and I'm frankly quite turned off by it. Even though I can see there might be some interesting drama involved, I can't read it easily because of the mistakes. -Characterization: I just felt like I didn't know these characters well enough to actually feel for them. Perhaps, applying "show, don't tell" and adding more personality to their dialogues will do the trick. Good points: -The author definitely knows how to write a love story, and the settings are already well-written. To conclude, it's a nice romance story but still needs a lot of work. Hopefully, it gets edited a bit more as the chapters go on. To the author, good job and keep improving as you go!

The story's still in its early stages but so far, the plot's shaping out to be interesting with both the main character and the main love interest introduced.

The story is beginning but the writing is good whit a good characters descriptions. I love romance so I will be waithing for more . I think it have great potencial and want to know more by te sinopsys. Keep going Author! I will support your work and waith for more!

The book is only just beginning, but it has potential to become more interesting as chapters are published. So keep up the good work author ! Now, I do have some problems with my reading: 1. Grammar and punctuation - probably the biggest flaw in my opinion; however, I’ve tried my best to help you correct some. 2. Different POV’s - I don’t usually mind different perspectives, but I would caution against switching too much in one chapter otherwise the readers may get disoriented and have to reread again, especially when they aren’t familiar with the names. I would suggest separating different POV’s into other chapters. Don’t get discouraged because we all start from somewhere ! So I hope you will be able to overcome any hurdles that may come your way.

Romance is not my cup of tea. But your story is good for the people who do. I like they way you are setting the story and building stuff up. I cannot say much due to you only having two chapters for right now. You do a few pronlems with grammar that rereading it, you will catch it. Keep up the good work!

Even though this book is on going and probably new, I can see a lot of potential in it. The characters, for me, are well described. Your plot is intriguing and interesting. I hope this book to be quite a success and i also can't wait for you to publish more chapters! :D