Review Detail of Helena_Seryma in Primordial Darkness Heretic Art

The cover hooked me and the premise made me jump in, lurking me to read some epic story. Unfortunately, it was not the case. That first chapter killed it for me. The grammar and writing were terrible but I pushed through expecting some ameliorations or at least a main character that will help me struggle through the errors poking my eyes. I'm not saying the story is bad. The ideas are good but the execution is terrible. Dear author, please, don't give up. But I beg you to fix your writing.