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Review Detail of Phoenix_Paradise in The Lost Heir (A Harry Potter Fanfic)

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Phoenix_Paradise
Phoenix_ParadiseLv43yrPhoenix_Paradise

What I like: All of it except one thing. What I don't like: The reason he can't cast the patronus charm is because he learnt dark magic. WTH?! SNAPE can use the patrons charm and he has definitely used dark magic, so why can't Frederick cast the patronus charm? It is, honestly, a bad (almost stupid) reason for why he can't cast it. If that is fixed then everything would be just about excellent. Note: I am making this even though I have only reached chaper 8.

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The Lost Heir (A Harry Potter Fanfic)

MapleLeaves

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MapleLeaves
MapleLeavesAuthorMapleLeaves

Well, I tried changing that from the criticisms I kept receiving. So I just made it more difficult for him to cast it. I want him to actually have the reason to make the Fire Patronus, so I made it like that. I hope you like the change though.

Shadewind
ShadewindLv6Shadewind

Harem...?

MapleLeaves:Well, I tried changing that from the criticisms I kept receiving. So I just made it more difficult for him to cast it. I want him to actually have the reason to make the Fire Patronus, so I made it like that. I hope you like the change though.
MapleLeaves
MapleLeavesAuthorMapleLeaves

No harem. Teenage drama and love triangles at most, but never harem. I do like the concept, but it just destroys the image of the Harry Potter world.

Shadewind:Harem...?
Lv3

Não sei qual o problema com o harém harry potter é praticamente o mundo real com mágicos escondidos aqui no Brasil mesmo tem um cantor de funk que tem umas 5 mulheres e mais de 30 filhos então para mim séria normal um harém no mundo de harry potter

MapleLeaves:No harem. Teenage drama and love triangles at most, but never harem. I do like the concept, but it just destroys the image of the Harry Potter world.
JaimeX07
JaimeX07Lv6JaimeX07

I hate reading triangles, when it starts im out

MapleLeaves:No harem. Teenage drama and love triangles at most, but never harem. I do like the concept, but it just destroys the image of the Harry Potter world.
Loyal_Hunter
Loyal_HunterLv4Loyal_Hunter

Name one. One Harry Potter character with a 'harem.' That's what I thought. You're talking about a singer in Brazil, this is not Brazil, it's England, and even people like Lucius Malfoy have only one wife, and I can easily see him thinking he's better than woman for just being born a man, still has one wife though. I don't like Harem, at all, one wife is enough, but here, it would be even worse because harems in Harry Potter just don't work, at least not without looking out of place in the world.

Não sei qual o problema com o harém harry potter é praticamente o mundo real com mágicos escondidos aqui no Brasil mesmo tem um cantor de funk que tem umas 5 mulheres e mais de 30 filhos então para mim séria normal um harém no mundo de harry potter
Phoenix_Paradise
Phoenix_ParadiseLv4Phoenix_Paradise

Noice but you could've just used the reason about the origin of the fire patronus existing being because he wanted a more offensive patronus charm, not just one that works on Dementors and their "relative" (they look like a floating cloak). But still noice anyway you did it.

MapleLeaves:Well, I tried changing that from the criticisms I kept receiving. So I just made it more difficult for him to cast it. I want him to actually have the reason to make the Fire Patronus, so I made it like that. I hope you like the change though.
shashank_bhatt
shashank_bhattLv13shashank_bhatt

don't make a love triangle man. It will really make it a drama that's not HP ff is about. At least that's what I think

MapleLeaves:No harem. Teenage drama and love triangles at most, but never harem. I do like the concept, but it just destroys the image of the Harry Potter world.
Invoke_Static
Invoke_StaticLv11Invoke_Static

It is well know that true dark wizards can't cast the patronus charm we never really know how far Snape went into the dark arts. But we see that other than Snape no other death eaters ever cast a patrons charm he may be able to do it due to his love of lilly

IndigoFox
IndigoFoxLv4IndigoFox

Why cant he just have an intrest in learning it I mean the normal one only repels dark creatures while I asume the burning one burns them. Also you can later say that Grindelfald lied to him and he can cast the fiddelius he just doesent have a happy enogh memory. And really how is knowing how to cast dark magic a detergent for learning it did he cast the unforgivables a hundred times or smt. Or was it the cat killing.

MapleLeaves:Well, I tried changing that from the criticisms I kept receiving. So I just made it more difficult for him to cast it. I want him to actually have the reason to make the Fire Patronus, so I made it like that. I hope you like the change though.
Believers
BelieversLv4Believers

Why did you stop writing this fanfic? It has been my first and most favorite Harry Potter Fanfic

MapleLeaves:No harem. Teenage drama and love triangles at most, but never harem. I do like the concept, but it just destroys the image of the Harry Potter world.
AidoneusPeverell
AidoneusPeverellLv4AidoneusPeverell

hope you update it

midgetydeath
midgetydeathLv3midgetydeath

To be fair, Snape's patronous is basically Lily and his view of Lily is...let's go with "of questionable health". As far as I'm aware, he's the only Dark Wizard in Harry Potter who ever uses a patronous. That doesn't mean Dark Wizards can't, but it does mean there is circumstantial evidence about it. This can be seen as having nothing to do with good and evil but instead is because dark magic uses negative emotions to empower it (I'm pretty sure Rowling's background lore said something like that) and so nurtures a certain way of thinking that probably would be incompatible with casting something like a patronous.

midgetydeath
midgetydeathLv3midgetydeath

Not particularly. Considering the time period they're stuck in, having concubines when you're magically powerful and/or wealthy would be extremely likely. Especially with their culture fascination with people who are magically powerful.

MapleLeaves:No harem. Teenage drama and love triangles at most, but never harem. I do like the concept, but it just destroys the image of the Harry Potter world.