Review Detail of LinYang in The Shadow I live With

I was wondering why the author and the character names were all so familiar when I realized that I reviewed your short story last time XD. Anyway, I'm glad that you decided to expand on it so we can see more about the characters and the story that you want to tell. Writing quality is great; I didn't notice many errors at all. The plot is moving along nicely, and I like how relatable the protagonist's thoughts are. Keep writing author! You're doing great!