the auther tries his best to make it every thing ground breaking. right from the start. he doesn't has experience. I good story plot. but it is ruined by how impatient the auther was. moreover you are really in a hurry ..the starting is messed. it destroys the taste of the reader. rewrite that. if you want to ensure that people open their wallet for you.
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