I'm not being a hater or anything like that but stating my opinion that this novel is shit. Really shitty. I mean I get that this is a fanfic and free but it is really shitty. You say that your "young" maybe that's what limited your imagination. That's all. Another shitty fanfic in this portal.
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Ok, why was it shitty? I'd like your feedback!
Whoever this guy is probably didn't actually have a reason for saying my novel is shitty.
Persin:Ok, why was it shitty? I'd like your feedback!
one of the reason why your novel is shitty because you made him issei's dog and he's a beta dog at that
Persin:Whoever this guy is probably didn't actually have a reason for saying my novel is shitty.
So being a kind and compassionate brother is being a dog in your eyes eh? That explains some things.
asaade_ragnarokm:one of the reason why your novel is shitty because you made him issei's dog and he's a beta dog at that
i am just saying this don't take it too srriously but i would say that the person who said 'beta hur dur' is probably feeling betrayed that you took a amazing concept kazuma in dxd and ****ed it so hard that he became the brother of issei. i am just sayin from experience that most of the people won't like the fanfic of dxd with issei as the brother of mc. like i love and i mean nutting in some hoes mouth LOVED the show but i would still kill issei the asshole doesn't get it on even with the whole fuckin harem at his hands.
Persin:So being a kind and compassionate brother is being a dog in your eyes eh? That explains some things.
hahaha and what is he if not a dog?
Persin:So being a kind and compassionate brother is being a dog in your eyes eh? That explains some things.
I know at least a couple reasons why Issei is actually a great person, but I understand some people just hate when a character doesn't take advantage of another person's emotional state so they can get laid
crazy_son:i am just saying this don't take it too srriously but i would say that the person who said 'beta hur dur' is probably feeling betrayed that you took a amazing concept kazuma in dxd and ****ed it so hard that he became the brother of issei. i am just sayin from experience that most of the people won't like the fanfic of dxd with issei as the brother of mc. like i love and i mean nutting in some hoes mouth LOVED the show but i would still kill issei the asshole doesn't get it on even with the whole fuckin harem at his hands.
The Red Dragon Emperor, Boob Dragon Emperor, a High Class Devil, A Half Dragon Half Devil, a being made of Ophis and Great Red's bodies, etc etc.
asaade_ragnarokm:hahaha and what is he if not a dog?
you call girls swooning over him bc he saved their fuckin lifes and cares for them that they know about and living with them a emotional phase~ honestly if that is how you think, then i know why you like issei as a character cause he isn't a charactet at all he is just a OP horny person without a brain who doesn't want to ****.
Persin:I know at least a couple reasons why Issei is actually a great person, but I understand some people just hate when a character doesn't take advantage of another person's emotional state so they can get laid
ahhhh issei's DOG
Persin:The Red Dragon Emperor, Boob Dragon Emperor, a High Class Devil, A Half Dragon Half Devil, a being made of Ophis and Great Red's bodies, etc etc.
also he has a hero complex and plot armor.
Persin:I know at least a couple reasons why Issei is actually a great person, but I understand some people just hate when a character doesn't take advantage of another person's emotional state so they can get laid
Oh yeah, Okashi! He's the only human in the world with a system, the All Seeing Eyes of the Gods, the boyfriend of the goddess of reincarnation, by my guess, the only person with Steal magic, born with high amounts of mana, a great musician, a gamer, etc etc
asaade_ragnarokm:ahhhh issei's DOG
While a hero complex does make you reckless, it doesn't necessarily make you a bad person. And his plot armor is really shitty compared to most protagonists, the dude died more than once. Oh, and I forgot to mention, he also doesn't screw his girls because he had trauma that really messed up his mind. And even when the trauma was gone, he was in too bad a situation to smash.
crazy_son:also he has a hero complex and plot armor.
i mean goku died 3 too 4 times too what is your point? bad person is not what my point was he is an idiot he doesn't have a character, he doesn't make sense, he is horny but doesn't smash cause trauma but he still has a dream of a harem god.
Persin:While a hero complex does make you reckless, it doesn't necessarily make you a bad person. And his plot armor is really shitty compared to most protagonists, the dude died more than once. Oh, and I forgot to mention, he also doesn't screw his girls because he had trauma that really messed up his mind. And even when the trauma was gone, he was in too bad a situation to smash.
and you really liked your own comment rn didn't you and he isn't great he will literally suck tities if given i choice between saving someone in trouble or suckin tities.
Persin:While a hero complex does make you reckless, it doesn't necessarily make you a bad person. And his plot armor is really shitty compared to most protagonists, the dude died more than once. Oh, and I forgot to mention, he also doesn't screw his girls because he had trauma that really messed up his mind. And even when the trauma was gone, he was in too bad a situation to smash.
Suckin Titties = Saving Person
crazy_son:and you really liked your own comment rn didn't you and he isn't great he will literally suck tities if given i choice between saving someone in trouble or suckin tities.
The power of being horny isn't strong enough to prevent trauma from effecting you.
crazy_son:i mean goku died 3 too 4 times too what is your point? bad person is not what my point was he is an idiot he doesn't have a character, he doesn't make sense, he is horny but doesn't smash cause trauma but he still has a dream of a harem god.
and the most important title of all Issei's DOG
Persin:Oh yeah, Okashi! He's the only human in the world with a system, the All Seeing Eyes of the Gods, the boyfriend of the goddess of reincarnation, by my guess, the only person with Steal magic, born with high amounts of mana, a great musician, a gamer, etc etc
hahaha whatever you say whatever you write whatever power and whatever title you give him he will always be ISSEI'S DOG
Persin:Oh yeah, Okashi! He's the only human in the world with a system, the All Seeing Eyes of the Gods, the boyfriend of the goddess of reincarnation, by my guess, the only person with Steal magic, born with high amounts of mana, a great musician, a gamer, etc etc
thanks for saving my time
