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*PLEASE READ THIS REVIEW ALL THE WAY THROUGH BEFORE DOING ANYTHING* I absolutely love the idea of this book and it should have been an enthralling story. However, as I read into the book it became more and more apparent that the plot of the story was being made up on the fly and that there was only thought as to that exact moment in the book. The main character was made fairly okay in the beginning but very soon he became like the traditional cardboard cutout of an isekai protagonist bearing no unique qualities and his voice and actions we as though they came right from the authors head making the Main Character fell less like a person and more like a puppet. and the "People" around him were even worse, not only were they used to info dump every few chapters but they orbited around the main character draining the chance that they could have had to have a well fleshed out personality. The plot feels forced and like a match made in heaven, making me feel a little weird because although I am not opposed to it, it makes it harder for me to really place myself in the character position and it breaks the immersion I would normally feel from a book. Now with all my nitpicking out of the way I actually really liked this book. The idea and concept behind the book were phenomenal I was so happy to see someone finally make a book within this category of multi-dimensions, and I must say good sir that this author did a wonderful job with his world-building and how he structured the way everything is supposed to work. I think that this author is not bad at writing but just needs some experience with the wording because info-dumping is okay in any book the only thing is that you need to word it so that it is easier on the reader. The characters need a little more fleshing out and they need to be a little touched up but that can be fixed with time and a little bit of hard work. Overall, I liked this book and to the author. This is a bit of constructive criticism and I hope you take it with a grain of salt as I really liked the concept of your book and I would love it even more if it can reach new heights with this review. I HOPE THAT YOU HAVE A WONDERFUL DAY.

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Hero System! Transported to Another World

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I won't take it as a grain of salt because this was very helpful. Thank you for this review, I'm trying to focus more on everything and After reading this review, I'm more motivated to do so. It'll take some time but I will flesh the character out more. I know that I have to spend more time on them. I genuinely appreciate it. This is my second book,( Don't even try looking at the first one, it's badd bad.) So I'm still figuring all these things out. About the plot, It was initially made with an original plan in mind but I didn't expect to win the WPC so I had to change a few things in the plot. Which I will say one thing about, things will make sense slowly. I'm actually taking a course on writing as well so I can be better. Once again, thank you for taking the time to write this review. I genuinely appreciate it.