Review Detail of John_sins1 in Mushoku Tensei Arthur
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This had so much potential, a MC with overpowered sword abilities and some solid wishes. But what we get are really unfunny jokes, and an MC that seems to not mind sharing his woman. He allows Rudeus who is also a grown man to bathe with Roxy, sleep with her and shows her off naked. Also there is a weird chapter where the MC’s parents are fucking and Roxy gets off to them and then the 5 year old MC eats her out while his parents continue fucking. This whole fanfic is just weird as **** and not really entertaining which is a huge shame.
Mushoku Tensei Arthur
Roxy_Greyrat21
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That's why I said in the synopsis that it was full of corny jokes so I'm already warning them... As for Roxy watching his parents and m*st*rb*t*ng it's canon... MC eating Roxy is a practice for writing scenes like that so if you did not like that then I think I still have so much to improve on my writing. As for MC sharing her their relationship is not yet lovers, its still the master and her disciples so Arthur and Rudeus in Roxy's eyes are equal and MC knows that. Doing a bath together is not that weird in Japanese culture as that is what they called 'skinship bonding'(I think) so I don't think he was 'sharing' Roxy for that scene its just MC's soul is japanese. Well thank you for reading all the way form here I appreciate that. XD
I appreciate your response, hopefully you write something more serious in the future because youve got some really good ideas, i just think we have different senses of humour and a few other differences that i personally dont like in the story. However, it might be right up some peoples lane as shown by other reviews so its your choice man, i would recommend you keep writing because youve got talent !
Roxy_Greyrat21:That's why I said in the synopsis that it was full of corny jokes so I'm already warning them... As for Roxy watching his parents and m*st*rb*t*ng it's canon... MC eating Roxy is a practice for writing scenes like that so if you did not like that then I think I still have so much to improve on my writing. As for MC sharing her their relationship is not yet lovers, its still the master and her disciples so Arthur and Rudeus in Roxy's eyes are equal and MC knows that. Doing a bath together is not that weird in Japanese culture as that is what they called 'skinship bonding'(I think) so I don't think he was 'sharing' Roxy for that scene its just MC's soul is japanese. Well thank you for reading all the way form here I appreciate that. XD
Thank you very much... You know I finally knew how writers felt... After you finished writing your first book then months or years later you'll get embarrassed ang cringed very hard thinking 'Did I really write this? Its like a monkey wrote this!!' kind of feeling. I didn't really think that much since I first wrote this and just have some fun. I want to rewrite the chapters but I don't have much time for that so I'm just going to continue with the earlier chapters as an inspiration to improve.
John_sins1:I appreciate your response, hopefully you write something more serious in the future because youve got some really good ideas, i just think we have different senses of humour and a few other differences that i personally dont like in the story. However, it might be right up some peoples lane as shown by other reviews so its your choice man, i would recommend you keep writing because youve got talent !
Oh good thing I read reviews before reading trash with a love interest bathing with someone that is not the MC
Roxy_Greyrat21:That's why I said in the synopsis that it was full of corny jokes so I'm already warning them... As for Roxy watching his parents and m*st*rb*t*ng it's canon... MC eating Roxy is a practice for writing scenes like that so if you did not like that then I think I still have so much to improve on my writing. As for MC sharing her their relationship is not yet lovers, its still the master and her disciples so Arthur and Rudeus in Roxy's eyes are equal and MC knows that. Doing a bath together is not that weird in Japanese culture as that is what they called 'skinship bonding'(I think) so I don't think he was 'sharing' Roxy for that scene its just MC's soul is japanese. Well thank you for reading all the way form here I appreciate that. XD
Mortifer:Oh good thing I read reviews before reading trash with a love interest bathing with someone that is not the MC
Thank for that i reallyy dislike ff with family guy like in my past life i am orpan now i have family blah blah i dont want to change plot i help formar mc to stronger blah blah man the movement you mess with formar mc like befriend become brother is already change the plot but they not act like not happen the most BS thing is people from other world can use from another world buy by mc from system staff even they not know or never heard but can use when they are not special being like Mc
Roxy_Greyrat21:That's why I said in the synopsis that it was full of corny jokes so I'm already warning them... As for Roxy watching his parents and m*st*rb*t*ng it's canon... MC eating Roxy is a practice for writing scenes like that so if you did not like that then I think I still have so much to improve on my writing. As for MC sharing her their relationship is not yet lovers, its still the master and her disciples so Arthur and Rudeus in Roxy's eyes are equal and MC knows that. Doing a bath together is not that weird in Japanese culture as that is what they called 'skinship bonding'(I think) so I don't think he was 'sharing' Roxy for that scene its just MC's soul is japanese. Well thank you for reading all the way form here I appreciate that. XD