Review Detail of Funone in Mushoku Tensei Arthur

Okay... I'm sorry to hurt your expectation so much... This was originally written for 'fun' when I just started this so not very good in terms of writing. In the start I as so gung-ho on writing a fanfic myself. I'm also lazy on rewriting it since I also don't have the time. Originally I want them to have a happy childhood but I got carried away and made many troll chapters. Then when the calamity happens I planned for him to experience hell. I'm sorry for ruining a masterpiece on this trashy fanfic. I also have a plan of making a Rudeus fanfic myself but not reincarnation. Right now I'm just accumilating experience and improve on my writing. Thanks for the review

Dont worry about it, You could always rewrite this later when you have more experience, the premese is very unique of an idea, honestly its the first mushoku fanfic ive seen so far so that works to your advantage along with the fact that this could easily become a very good novel once you rewrite it to be more in tune with your oc’s into the book, matter of fact considering the nature of mushoku you should probably make the abilities you want to give him more in line with the book, like say the haki, instead of it being a power from another fiction how about mailking it ‘an original power’ with very similar properties :D