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This story is simplistic. The Protagonist tries to commit suicide because he is a total loser—and then gets cold feet part way and prays to the gods to save him. The gods air impressed by his impressive Fortitude and Indomitability????? This is a dude who can't even commit Seppuku and follow through with it. Instead, he takes pills and then changes his mind halfway. At any rate, the gods give him a system and more special abilities than you can shake a stick at. Really, if I wasn't trying hard to find ONE story to review every day, I wouldn't have read past the second chapter. Also, there is a, "See Dick run. Run Dick, run!" Kinda short elementary school sentences and cadences...
(PAUSED)
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Well thank you for your review, We actually changed it already that he didnt commit suicide i dont know why you all Say this actually he got bullied by everyone because he was weak and got killed, but thank you! I‘ll think about it and try to write it better, and as i said its my first time write a novel so i hope its ok I‘ll try to make the sentence better and sound better!