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2020-09-29 14:19

Though not my cup of tea, I can see chances of turning this into from good to great. Kudos to the author. The author can still maximize the potential of this novel. Hmmn, Let's see what can I offer. The author can improve a little more on the emotional aspects or inner turmoil of the characters. Zeroing in those points will help them become more relatable. Adding a little more world-building will also help to capture the readers especially the beginning parts. You can make a diamond out of this. May the author write more, edit more, learn more, and earn more. Cheers!

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