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SomniferLv124yr
2020-09-22 00:39

Great writing and story plot. Very good progression of the story so far and he has a good idea where he seems to be going. Thank you for your hard work and keep it up! I wouldn't say no to 10X as many chapters :)

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WeavingSpider
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Hello fellow reader and Author, this my review while i am at chapter 12 of this novel/fanfic The good things : - Its writing quality is better than many novels on this site 3/5 - A new, atleast for me, Marvel character, (never heard of Cipher) - Updates are okay to - Nice long chapter The bad things : - every paragraph starts with " I " - dialogue are mostly written in a cluster within paragraphs - too much info dumping (could be used for future interaction or dialogue between the mc and someone else) - The Mc himself, he jumps if a door opens, stutters when he talks to a girl and doesnt even wear some kind of mask to hide who he is. ( see kingpin part ) He also talks out loud with his "smartwatch/AI, in a Library or on street, what screams to be overheard by someone or something (Shield ...) To sum up, Interesting novel with great potential and okayish writing quality but which might need an editor to truly shine. Also some chapter would be nice to see our Mc interacting with the world and the people living within. I will read the rest of the novel too and might update in the comment section of this review. So far a 3.5/5 stars Where 5 stars is a book which i will read several times and 1 star is trash with too many clishes and bad writing quality or a MC acting like a anime character around woman. If you read till here, you have read 1579 words written by me and i thank you for taken this time for my review. Bless you all with a cup full of warm tea and have a nice day or night beautyfull people, apache helicopter or whatever you might be.

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