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2020-08-24 01:25

I will give honest review. it's a good story. Synopsis is too short and not much showing about the story. And the story concept can't get from it. If you add more in synopsis about the story and it's concepts it will catch the redears attention. And the long paragraph need to be cut in to shorts. Don't bother too much about these things. It's all happens with newies and it happened with me to and my fellow author give suggestions and I reedited it. And for you I will suggest Read more and read others book and start to learn from it. From my personal experience. You will improve and I can see you will reach the top. work hard keep going.

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Thanks a ton, for your honest comment, will do proofreading, as this is old fiction.

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