Review Detail of Avidfan in Mages of the North: The Adventure Begins

The adventure story is actually fun and great. There is an immersion in it. I hope that the MC will gain some special talents or traits soon=) I dont really feel the naruto part but I feel the Tolkien part when they are forced to leave their home. And I feel the grandeur of the world building. Although author is new but he puts his heart into the story. Some helpful suggestions to make the format better: - Shorter paragrahs - Remove the Chapter in the title