Review Detail of Ethan_Archer in Swallowing The Spider (Linear)

While the story and world are interesting, it comes with the huge baggage of needlessly long paragraphs filled with unwanted information and monologues. It incredibly difficult to read, its mostly tangents of the main character explaining things that have nothing to do with the story. A cursory review by the author cutting out the unnecessary bit would probably make this a great story. Even just breaking uo the long paragraphs to no more than 5-7 lines would make it easier to read.