Review Detail of LuciferVermillion in Shadow Lord Reborn
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Okay... A revenge-lead RPG + Dungeon. So, the 20th king of Lyria trained so hard in swords and magic and it goes down to the drain and reborn as a shade instead. Not a bad RPG system, but killing a Level 7 wolf could only level up 3 levels? I think you could a little more exp in it. Must kill to get EXP instead of training? Could use some EXP potion. I don't like restrictions on one's growth that can't be done without training. About "Where do I start? How about the beginning"-- the flashback is way too flashback. It feels jarring if the flashback went to far back in the past. I think you could introduce the MC's past first, or maybe describe how Luther killed him. Grammar mistakes everywhere. Could give some editing instead. Overall: Classic revenge RPG.
Shadow Lord Reborn
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Thank you for the feedback, but you see I wanted to make the story seem realistic and if I gave him exp potions it would defeat the point. Plus defeating a LvL 7 wolf and getting 3 levels is plenty enough in my humble opinion. You may be right about the flashback seeming too forced but it does describe the characters past and how Luther killed him. As for the grammar mistakes, there aren't that many cause I proof read on Grammarly and if you find any pls do tell so I can correct them. Anyways thank you for the review much appreciated.