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senseless **** happens, like most WBWL bks -MC leaves house at 5 yrs during a party and no one notices [he is in a party with some of the most powerful people in Britain and no one notices] -5 yrs old and MC walks into a bank and does transactions.....the noble houses are involved but the bank does business with the kid? hell, wouldnt the potter house be informed since MC took the account?. stupid -Needless and senseless bash of characters for no reason -Stupid reasons that make MC force MC to go to hogwarts -needless bash of the magical britain its just bash and no proper explanations. forced hate and alot a of senseless ****. [why couldnt u wait a few yrs? or atleast make it more sensible?]

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Harry Lightbolt: Forgotten Genius

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It was a birthday party, and he was under an invisibility cloak, it's not really unbelievable that he manages to leave through the floo considering he's not breaking in or something. Allow child to do business? It's not totally unreasonable that goblins still do business with a child, especially with someone as profitable as a potter. Senseless bashing, well.. there's not really a lot of options.. it's either bash or don't and I mean.. it's obvious what I chose, dumbledore is too full of himself and thinks he's always right, not impossible.

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no.......its a heirloom...my ass MC would take it without being noticed, hell it should be guarded,,,also dude, even in the OG they didnt allow kids to do business, hell in FFs most writer do at 11 even then its retarded but not as as stupid as here

EdgyEdgelord101:It was a birthday party, and he was under an invisibility cloak, it's not really unbelievable that he manages to leave through the floo considering he's not breaking in or something. Allow child to do business? It's not totally unreasonable that goblins still do business with a child, especially with someone as profitable as a potter. Senseless bashing, well.. there's not really a lot of options.. it's either bash or don't and I mean.. it's obvious what I chose, dumbledore is too full of himself and thinks he's always right, not impossible.
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What about glamours or polyjuice potion. Also, it is plausible for someone to run away at that age. Either the parents noticed but don't give a f**k or they live with the potters a lax family of wizards who doesn't even know who to trust.

amaturewriter:no.......its a heirloom...my ass MC would take it without being noticed, hell it should be guarded,,,also dude, even in the OG they didnt allow kids to do business, hell in FFs most writer do at 11 even then its retarded but not as as stupid as here
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none of this **** happened, also its impossible for a kid to make that **** or use it....hell only reason hermoinie could was cause she was a genius and also cause of plot power

AvatarLOK2:What about glamours or polyjuice potion. Also, it is plausible for someone to run away at that age. Either the parents noticed but don't give a f**k or they live with the potters a lax family of wizards who doesn't even know who to trust.
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well, I just read it and some **** doesn't make sense. No five year old is that f**ing mature.

amaturewriter:none of this **** happened, also its impossible for a kid to make that **** or use it....hell only reason hermoinie could was cause she was a genius and also cause of plot power
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Also, Hermione could have run away easily. Her parents can't even enter the wizarding world without outside help. They just muggle.

amaturewriter:none of this **** happened, also its impossible for a kid to make that **** or use it....hell only reason hermoinie could was cause she was a genius and also cause of plot power
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lets stop talking....cause I am losing brain cells here.....u missing something common sense

AvatarLOK2:Also, Hermione could have run away easily. Her parents can't even enter the wizarding world without outside help. They just muggle.
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use sense. How are u going to find someone who can literally apparate anywhere and has a hidden world which muggles aren't welcomed in. I am just wondering. She going to make this worldwide. Obliviation was just to stop her parents from 'trying' to find her and also stopping them from worrying.

amaturewriter:lets stop talking....cause I am losing brain cells here.....u missing something common sense
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bro...oh man, fk...jesus,,,she was an *****...a fking *****, and for fks sake she was a genius...she had plot power tooo,,,BUT MOST IMPORTANTLY SHE WASNT 5...she was 16

AvatarLOK2:use sense. How are u going to find someone who can literally apparate anywhere and has a hidden world which muggles aren't welcomed in. I am just wondering. She going to make this worldwide. Obliviation was just to stop her parents from 'trying' to find her and also stopping them from worrying.
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im am saying I agree with you on the fact that it was not plausible for a five year old to escape this way or most ways but what you were saying was that Hermione had to be smart to escape. I'm just saying she didn't. My fucking god. destroying my brain cells

amaturewriter:bro...oh man, fk...jesus,,,she was an *****...a fking *****, and for fks sake she was a genius...she had plot power tooo,,,BUT MOST IMPORTANTLY SHE WASNT 5...she was 16
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u bought hermione into this ****...damn,,,everything u wrote is here.....i am out...u want argue...u go a ahead...I am out...if we continue we'd just bash heads and hate each other for a stupid reason as a ****ty FF

AvatarLOK2:im am saying I agree with you on the fact that it was not plausible for a five year old to escape this way or most ways but what you were saying was that Hermione had to be smart to escape. I'm just saying she didn't. My fucking god. destroying my brain cells
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true I'm done too

amaturewriter:u bought hermione into this ****...damn,,,everything u wrote is here.....i am out...u want argue...u go a ahead...I am out...if we continue we'd just bash heads and hate each other for a stupid reason as a ****ty FF
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cool... hopefully meet u on another FF we both enjoy on better terms **: any FF suggestions?

AvatarLOK2:true I'm done too
EdgyEdgelord101
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This is like 21 days old and I don't really care, but I still would like to say, the cloak wasn't an heirloom, it was just a normal invisibility cloak, so it not being guarded isn't all that surprising or anything. As for being too young, well I did change it to 7 which is admittedly still too young, but meh, these are goblins who love profit. Too young? You got money, you're in. If that's not canon even for goblins, then they're my unique, fanfic goblins.

amaturewriter:no.......its a heirloom...my ass MC would take it without being noticed, hell it should be guarded,,,also dude, even in the OG they didnt allow kids to do business, hell in FFs most writer do at 11 even then its retarded but not as as stupid as here
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As for stupid reason to go to Hogwarts.. I mean, I don't think a magical contract is that dumb, he is the heir/lord of a founders house, therefore he is contracted to go to Hogwarts, finally, senseless bashing. Here, they're bad people, that's all I need to say. It's fan fiction, my characters. I also don't plan on making them evil/bad for no reason, they will have regrets and whatnot, but meh, I've barely wrote anything for this fanfic anyway, there's much to be developed.

amaturewriter:no.......its a heirloom...my ass MC would take it without being noticed, hell it should be guarded,,,also dude, even in the OG they didnt allow kids to do business, hell in FFs most writer do at 11 even then its retarded but not as as stupid as here
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To enjoy ur bk, it means ignoring logic, character devolopment and actual facts. Look ur story is an FF, so basically what u write is correct cause u wrote it as an ff. But Ur story is basically an ff of an ff with basically almost zero cannon knowledge, info and an MC who is protected by plot to a lvl where he is a god and everyone is a retard to the point where its just funny and stupid. Plus I've explained with wiki in the comments in some chps chps and i could do it again here but it would basically feel like me insulting ur work or just saying u wrong over and over. And i dont want that Plus i dropped it, so i am not really that invested to explain ur wrong and senseless logic. So gl and peace.

EdgyEdgelord101:As for stupid reason to go to Hogwarts.. I mean, I don't think a magical contract is that dumb, he is the heir/lord of a founders house, therefore he is contracted to go to Hogwarts, finally, senseless bashing. Here, they're bad people, that's all I need to say. It's fan fiction, my characters. I also don't plan on making them evil/bad for no reason, they will have regrets and whatnot, but meh, I've barely wrote anything for this fanfic anyway, there's much to be developed.