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2021-04-04 04:02

It's really a great fiction and it's progressing very well! I like the way author explains it in detail. Keep writing and never give up! You're doing so well, hope your dreams will come true.

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So yeah. Pretty bad review. First point is, although the "child nanny become the wife and mother" is common, the idea on an imperial nanny is good. So at first I was quite happy. An ancient China where there could be an imperial nanny ? Sounds interesting. But it is a modern world with an imperial family ? Wtf. Now an enthusiastic FL that want to take care of children, good, uncommon. Talented as a detective, well every FL need a cheat, so it's OK. But damn her personality is horrible. She meet the first 'enemy', and insult her and slap her directly. She is barely better than a low class bitchy villainess. I mean, respect to a stranger, even if they are rude, is basic etiquette and courtesy ! Now, ML is a jerk. He never met his son, for 5 years ! Because the boy remind him of the mother ! He is basically saying : "booohooohoooo, the love of my life is dead, I don't want to be reminder if heeerr". If I could, I would slap him and yell at him to get himself together. He is an *****, an emperor, and a father. He has no excuse to say in the past. He has responsabilités and should uphold them. Also, he is a pathetic mess of misery and self pity. I know, novel world, à placé where life shattering live exist, but smh, one of the most important human, abilities is to forget. And lastly, this world. OK, à royal family still in power is a modern world, can pass, good enough. But a harem? Seriously? In which non Islamic country is a harem even socially acceptible? Which lead us to another problem. There is basically no social structure. I tried, but can't see one. Oh, and lastly, it isn't that well written. Author has been lazy by directly writing the name of the speaker, and the place the action take place. Most of the writings are dialogues. It look like a manga script. If you read this, author, those infos (speaker name, character background and else) should be either integrated in the text like : "okay", god said. "let us create the world". Here, you know who is speaking. Also, you can use decorated structure, that add to your world and make the book better. Instead of saying 'Blabla mansion, FL room : *insert dialogue*', you should say : "within the blabla mansion, the lights of FL room where still on. Inside the room, the young girl was *insert whatever*' Anyway, sorry that this review may affect book ratings, but good luck on improving

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