Review Detail of nourhaffar3112 in The Alpha Prince and his Silver Lone Wolf

I fancy the plot and the story; the first chapter is a great start for it! The pace is okay, but I can't completely judge since I haven't fully read the book. You could have a change of words; various word usage. The correct usage of language leads to the scene being completely imaginable as if played in front of the reader in real life. There are some misplaced punctuation. You could use some transitional phrases as well as saying things like 'he diverted his gaze' or 'she fiddled with her earlobe' for more smoothness. Overall, the story is a great read, but with another polish, it could become even pleasanter. I know you are new to writing and that this is your first novel, so I encourage you to write more, and I am sure you will improve! [img=recommend]