Review Detail of Khyati94820 in A FAILURE'S HOPEFUL JOURNEY

The start of the story was a little confusing but that's what made me want to keep going so it's good. Descriptions are adequate but don't try to write a paragraph of description for each person. Break it down and spread it throughout a page or so. And also check out the grammatical errors, I came across a few. The technology and the storyline is really fascinating. You Xiwang and You Zhichi's relationship has been portrayed really well, the brother sister bond shines through. Awesome job overall👍🏻