Review Detail of KingWhite in Martin Leonidas

well, starting your story doesn't make much sense, I can list the following errors that I saw: • first you don't show correctly when the characters are speaking, because the speech and the narrative are in the same paragraph, thus making reading difficult. • second, it doesn’t make sense that the goddess fell in love with the rapist (protagonist), without suffering some kind of Stockholm syndrome, that is, it doesn’t make sense, and like a guy who before dying sends a message of love to his mother, benefactor ", doesn’t make any sense and is not something to ignore. • third because it becomes incredibly OP without any effort, and let's say that the character had a horrible personality from the beginning, you could use this scenario to demonstrate a story with evolution of the character, that is, making the transition from bad personality to a better personality. There are more errors but I'm too lazy to look, I suggest you fix this.