The beginning is really intriguing, I didn't know how the main character was going to develop, but he's pretty interesting so far. No real mistakes that I could find, although some of the detailing at the start was toeing the line of enough and too much. The story is interesting, I'm not one to delve into horror or this type of genre, but it is very intriguing and I can appreciate where the author is taking it. Keep up the good work!
LyingCrowPromises
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LIKEThank you, I know I have the tendency to describe 'too much', but I am used to that kind of writing. I'm not native to English language, but Serbian, and the Serbian literature focuses on making the reader imagine everything, from feelings to actions, while English literature focuses on narrative that is vague. Tbh, I'd be ashamed if I made some big or noticeable grammar mistakes because I'm an English language major XD