This story is not bad, it is far from what I expected. The story is not for me at all. It is interesting for people who like stories like this, and your world building is very good. You have a nice writing style that keeps people in. The problem is the grammar, if you reread through your story, you can easily find them. But the grammar mistakes are small and doesn’t throw off the story. Unfortunately this story is not for me, but for the people is will enjoy the story.
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LIKEYeah, thanks. You see this book was the first book I ever wrote. So I decided not to correct the grammar. Why? So when readers notice that the mistakes get fewer and fewer, they'll realize that everyone can improve. Who knows, maybe someone will get motivated from this. And also I decided not to change the mistakes so even I can see how I improve as days go by.