Review Detail of EldritchTheDead in BECAUSE IT'S FIRST LOVE

The story is good and overall pretty unique on it's own, I can see it rising the ranks in the nearby future. But organizing the dialogues and narration would be a plus in reading it, therefore garnering more readers. Since the lengthy and endless paragraphs would make it seem too boring to invest time in. Overall, would still recommend to readers of this genre out there.