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Hello author! I liked the title and also the cover. It's really catchy. Like you'll be curious as to what the story is about based on the title and cover. All in all, my reading experience is great. The story is still on going, so i bet many amazing things are yet to be unfold in the future updates. I will definitely keep this in my library to keep me updated. Just lemme give my observation first. Character design here, for me, needs work. Adding descriptive words more can help. Spacing also is needed in the story. I can also see a few Tagalog words, and Filipinisms. Just be careful with that. You should also be careful w/ the grammar. Also their actions and emotions. I think it also needs work by, again, adding descriptive words to it. ☺️ In short, all needs work in terms of details even in minor ones for the readers to really have a vivid picture of what's going on in the story. ☺️ The story has a potential. Keep improving. ❤️❤️❤️

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Oblitus Regina [Forgotten Queen]

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Elise_Aigasaki
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Thank you, I'll remember that and improve my work in the following chapters.