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bilu619
bilu619Lv54yr
2020-08-06 03:56

First of all i love your work absalutly no hate here But You know i do not want to be that guy but i have to be By giving him all that your just writings your self into a whole which you cant claw your way out of U could have made do with tayjutsu nad biyakugan and he stil would be as op you as want and not break the world Shrigan is a hax, six path is a hax,

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amaturewriter
amaturewriterLv4

whilst I agree with u, I will say ur ENGRISH is torturous **: ur ' The Adventure Hunter in one piece ' is this dropped?

bilu619
bilu619Lv5

Yah i know my grammar sacks balls but and i do tend to misspell words And no i just haven't got the time to get dow to write it i have three chpters i worte before life decided to kick me in the balls

amaturewriter:whilst I agree with u, I will say ur ENGRISH is torturous **: ur ' The Adventure Hunter in one piece ' is this dropped?
bilu619
bilu619Lv5

Yah i know my grammar sacks balls but and i do tend to misspell words And no i just haven't got the time to get dow to write it i have three chpters i worte before life decided to kick me in the balls

amaturewriter:whilst I agree with u, I will say ur ENGRISH is torturous **: ur ' The Adventure Hunter in one piece ' is this dropped?
bilu619
bilu619Lv5

Yah i know my grammar sacks balls but and i do tend to misspell words And no i just haven't got the time to get dow to write it i have three chpters i worte before life decided to kick me in the balls

amaturewriter:whilst I agree with u, I will say ur ENGRISH is torturous **: ur ' The Adventure Hunter in one piece ' is this dropped?
bilu619
bilu619Lv5

Yah i know my grammar sacks balls but and i do tend to misspell words And no i just haven't got the time to get dow to write it i have three chpters i worte before life decided to kick me in the balls

amaturewriter:whilst I agree with u, I will say ur ENGRISH is torturous **: ur ' The Adventure Hunter in one piece ' is this dropped?
bilu619
bilu619Lv5

Yah i know my grammar sacks balls but and i do tend to misspell words And no i just haven't got the time to get dow to write it i have three chpters i worte before life decided to kick me in the balls

amaturewriter:whilst I agree with u, I will say ur ENGRISH is torturous **: ur ' The Adventure Hunter in one piece ' is this dropped?
bilu619
bilu619Lv5

Yah i know my grammar sacks balls but and i do tend to misspell words And no i just haven't got the time to get dow to write it i have three chpters i worte before life decided to kick me in the balls

amaturewriter:whilst I agree with u, I will say ur ENGRISH is torturous **: ur ' The Adventure Hunter in one piece ' is this dropped?
bilu619
bilu619Lv5

Yah i know my grammar sacks balls but and i do tend to misspell words And no i just haven't got the time to get dow to write it i have three chpters i worte before life decided to kick me in the balls

amaturewriter:whilst I agree with u, I will say ur ENGRISH is torturous **: ur ' The Adventure Hunter in one piece ' is this dropped?
bilu619
bilu619Lv5

Yah i know my grammar sacks balls but and i do tend to misspell words And no i just haven't got the time to get dow to write it i have three chpters i worte before life decided to kick me in the balls

amaturewriter:whilst I agree with u, I will say ur ENGRISH is torturous **: ur ' The Adventure Hunter in one piece ' is this dropped?
amaturewriter
amaturewriterLv4

u mother****er,,,my phoneeeeeeeeeeeee

bilu619:Yah i know my grammar sacks balls but and i do tend to misspell words And no i just haven't got the time to get dow to write it i have three chpters i worte before life decided to kick me in the balls
bilu619
bilu619Lv5

Brah i am more amzed that u read my amature work Any devices

amaturewriter:u mother****er,,,my phoneeeeeeeeeeeee
bilu619
bilu619Lv5

Brah i am more amzed that u read my amature work Any devices

amaturewriter:u mother****er,,,my phoneeeeeeeeeeeee
amaturewriter
amaturewriterLv4

what do u mean by Any devices?

bilu619:Brah i am more amzed that u read my amature work Any devices
bilu619
bilu619Lv5

Any thing realy do u have any critic you want to sy about my work plot wise or character protrying wise Any thing would be helpful

amaturewriter:what do u mean by Any devices?
bilu619
bilu619Lv5

Any thing realy do u have any critic you want to sy about my work plot wise or character protrying wise Any thing would be helpful

amaturewriter:what do u mean by Any devices?
bilu619
bilu619Lv5

Any thing realy do u have any critic you want to sy about my work plot wise or character protrying wise Any thing would be helpful

amaturewriter:what do u mean by Any devices?
bilu619
bilu619Lv5

Any thing realy do u have any critic you want to sy about my work plot wise or character protrying wise Any thing would be helpful

amaturewriter:what do u mean by Any devices?
amaturewriter
amaturewriterLv4

ur eng in ur bk is fine...just use grammarly but over there its readable...as for the story, it was interesting but not much content, only thing I can say is to not look at the world like an anime, but rather for what it is, a fked up place,,,and hopefully MC isnt a friendly dude, or will follow cannon cast...make it before..more interesting

bilu619:Any thing realy do u have any critic you want to sy about my work plot wise or character protrying wise Any thing would be helpful
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