Review Detail of mssuigeneris in The Forgotten Memories : SHIO KAIBA

The story's premise is actually good. And I think the author has a good grasp of grammar as well. However, I had trouble in keeping myself interested in the characters' conversations - perhaps because there is an over-repetition on many generic words that they seem to follow a patter already. I mean this like: ___ replied with a ___ tone ___ said ___ responded This happens everytime. I believe this can be modified into a more engaging conversation like: 'Karen raised her brows at Shio who eyed her curiously' or something. (This is but a mere suggestion only) Still, the story remains promising. Especially when they started to talk about phobias and the peculiar thing that happened to Sam. Keep going!