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Review Detail of Volteair in The Forgotten Memories : SHIO KAIBA

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This story does a good job of suddenly throwing Shio into this world of chaos, along with the reader as well. There's that gnawing curiosity of what happens next and how everything in this mysterious world functions, and the creatures that inhabit it. There were typos that I noticed often going through, not to mention a repetition of the phrase "Character said with a (BLANK) tone." It definitely needed some switching up, which I am glad to see got changed up in the later chapters, but still was present.

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The Forgotten Memories : SHIO KAIBA

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I found another person noticing that I'm overly relying on my that phrase in order to express my characters thoughts.. I'll change that in my future updates :) and after I finish the book, I'll do some rewrite on my previous chapters. Thanks for the comment! I'm glad grammar is no longer my main problem