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SpectralApparition
SpectralApparitionLv53yrSpectralApparition

If you guys are looking for the netori, harem and r18 stuff might have to wait till this reach 100 chaps. mc character growth is just too strange for someone that was essentially an otaku. Too much self identity crisis and mc is still stuck in thinking in the norm when he is pretty much in a ntr game. The moral thing is just getting annoying at this point, contradicting thoughts that just annoys me or most readers. This is slow paced but don't central this around just the mc since it got boring reading it. Like adding about world building and how that world works from his research in his PC would probably help the mc make solid decisions. Cause from all the chapters so far, he gets pissed most of the time like as if a stick got stuck in his ass when given some info from his "friends". The big events so far that should have boost his character growth a lot, always have a reason to revert him back to normalcy thinking. It was already annoying at the beginning but now it's 45 chapters and little changed other than his physical attributes. Especially the revenge part where he thought this plan and how he was really gonna ruin this girl and even brags about how he will do it right from those shitty "revenge" stories he read in his previous world. Instead we get something that missed that claim..... it would be better if the author never added those sentences/reference cause it just made the mc even more unbearable. it may make sense realistic wise but God dam is it an annoying/bad story telling. Nothing is really note worthy that would hook the reader because of the "slow pace" and the 2 chapters or so of r18 text are probably what 90% of the reader cared about. The slow pace is just hard to pull off and may need to really amp his character. Cause at this point, you can just skip/skim chapters and probably won't miss anything important.

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Transmigrated as an NTR’ed protagonist.

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SailusGebel
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Fair points. However, I'm trying to write with the thought that later on, the previous chapters would be seen in a new light. As for the mc, should I put tag the unreliable narrator? Because he is one. Also, at most, ten or fewer chapters and the novel will change abruptly. Anyway, thanks for a rather great critique instead of spamming thumbs up or writing something like this 'novel suck because I don't like it'. I would try to implement some of your advice in the story.

SpectralApparition
SpectralApparitionLv5SpectralApparition

I respect the reply. Slow pace stories are in my opinion are the hardest to pull off. I'm sure you've probably read some good slow paced novels before. Maybe copy some examples what made it enjoyable to read and restructure it to fit your story. When in doubt, reading the very source of inspirations that made you make this story might help. [img=recommend]

SailusGebel:Fair points. However, I'm trying to write with the thought that later on, the previous chapters would be seen in a new light. As for the mc, should I put tag the unreliable narrator? Because he is one. Also, at most, ten or fewer chapters and the novel will change abruptly. Anyway, thanks for a rather great critique instead of spamming thumbs up or writing something like this 'novel suck because I don't like it'. I would try to implement some of your advice in the story.