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bbrightvcsLv34yr
2020-08-11 21:07

So here's my review about this story First off, it has a really good story line. Although the first chapter isn't that really catchy, as you go on, it gets more and more interesting, Trust me. Next, Writing quality is good. It has minimal grammatical errors which are all completely fine. But as the author said, it will be edited in the future. Description of scenes is also thumbs up 👍 I love how the author describes those gory scenes in this book and the choice of words are just right. Development of Story and Characters is okay. This book is just starting, in the future chapters for sure, we will get to know the characters well. All in all this is a very good read for me. It has a very unique vibe and i like that. Well, as you all know, there are a lot of books out there with the same genre as this making everything almost the same, but for me this gave off a different vibe. Hope you guys like it as well 💗 Keep up the good work! I will be looking forward for more 💗

Fleur-de-Lis

heyimliane
4.7
10 Chs

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heyimliane
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Thank you so muucchh!! ❤️❤️

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Hi guys, Author here! I am going to shamelessly give my novel a 5 star lol. But I’m not here to just do that. I want to inform all the Kofies or readers that I might not give new update for a while because my novel will undergo editing, it may be a major editing so some words, grammar, description and details will change but of course, the plot will never ever change or be replaced. The editing may take few weeks but I assure you, I will do my best to make my novel even better. Have a nice day/afternoon/night everyone!! Also... Thank you for 6K in just a month! I love you all!! 🥺

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Aeolius
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I don't really read romance but... I don't understand! The first chapter made me feel all giddy and ****! The next thing I knew I kept reading till the end. It's interesting alright. I'll give you that. The story flows well and this type of first person narration makes it soft for my eyes. Just hope there were more chapters TT

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HappyChills
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Usually I’m not into romance but this caught my eye... really interesting and great to see a story like this around here. Needs some recognition!

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White_Falcon21
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Volteair
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This story definitely has some chills and suspense building up slowly. At some points, you think you know who the unknown yandere killer is, and then the next everything changes on you and you're not sure. I can't wait until the eventual reveal of who the killer is and how she's going to be free from them. Loved this and can't wait for more!

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Elise_Aigasaki
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I love it! I love yandere stories and this is my new fave! I love how well-written it is. There is also a mysterious vibe in it that I love so much. I really enjoyed reading it!

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madskie00017
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I am a romance fanatic. I love the scenes which make your heart flutter. The plot of the story is weaved beautifully. It has so much potential to be honest! Keep writing! More Please!

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SamsaraWithWords
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A breath of fresh air. This novel reminds me of the series You on Netflix where you're not sure if it's a romance or a horror/thriller. Really interesting premise. Great job author!

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I’m your reader from Wattpad and this book is 10x better in Webnovel! I’m a certified Kofi! ❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️

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mssuigeneris
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This one has a good start. It surely baited me with that first chapter. As an anime fan, who happens to have a taste for shoujo genre, i found the story quite interesting. Author has good grasp of grammar, however, I can't help but notice the repetitions of words used in the storytelling. What I mean is, the character expressions and adjectives used to describe it are quite generic. This isn't a bad thing, but I think I'll have a better reading experience when the vocabulary of a book is immense. Please don't be discouraged on this, coz your work is really good. This is something you can improve on. Kudos!

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