Maybe it’s just me, but it feels like 90% picking up girls and about their emotions. Don’t misunderstand me, the harem theme can work out, but 6+ love interests in 22 chapters is more than fast and the actual story (dungeoneering) might lack at some point. Don’t take it to heart, it’s just my impression that the focus might be a bit too much on collecting women. They might give the impression of being only one of his women instead of an individual. Writing quality: 5. It’s in the upper end for fanfiction on this site. Updating stability: 5. 1-2 chapters a day. Story development: 3. The story centers around growing his harem and a bit dungeoneering. The first part lacks depth and the second is too small as of yet imo. That might and probably will change in the future. Character development: 3. Nothing to say to the existing characters. New ones are often inspired by others, but it’s clear the author put some thought into their status. Love interests need some more individuality. The Mc has a hero complex but this might work in Danmachi and didn’t influence my rating. World background: 5. Nothing outstanding to say about that. It’s Danmachi and I didn’t spot any big mistake about that. I’m a fan of some originality, but it is not a necessity. Overall score: 4.2
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Both as a reader and writer, I appreciate your review. The reason for there to be little dungeoneering is because I have been following the original timeline of major events and building the Hestia Familia into something bigger. From now on I am focusing on Character Development and exploration of the Dungeon, plus my own events that will happen because of the Butterfly Effect. Once again: Thank you very much
