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Wulvenclave
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So, it’s time for my long overdue 25-chapter review (I’m 113 chapters in at time of this review). As always, I will try to remain positive and give impartial feedback. Note: this review is very long and doesn't contain a TL;DR. Pros (the good) > Character development. It isn’t very often that writers give a chapter intro to the MC when they are in their original world and this can cause issues with character development in the early chapters (there are exceptions). The fact that the MC does have such a chapter (and it’s so damn realistic, it’s scary), really helps to establish that connection between the reader and the MC. Being able to relate to the MC truly makes a story more enjoyable. > World building. Another great forte of this story is its sense of wonder for the world. I don’t really know how to describe this but establishing an attraction from the reader to know more about the world is evidence of good writing. While the specific laws for this world haven’t been clearly defined yet (what are the restrictions), there is still tonnes of time to establish this in future chapters. > Realistic characters. This is pretty self-explanatory. I’m not really sure why readers/writers like it when the MC acts so unrealistic but I know that I don’t. The main thing I want to draw attention to is the MC’s trauma. I have seen a couple reviews and comments on people complaining about the MC’s passivity but there are two major factors at play which make the MC’s current passivity a more likely scenario if it were played out realistically. First, the MC is not sure of the extent of their abilities. This is becoming less an issue where I am in the novel but in earlier chapters it is a major factor. Second, clicking your fingers and suddenly you’re okay is just complete BS, especially if it is the sort of trauma described in the MC. Clearly most people here possess the lowest of the lowest quantities of knowledge for how psychology works and I find people’s unrealistic desires are more annoying than the passivity of the MC. The MC isn’t even that bad. When pushed into a corner, they will definitely release their ability and pretty much pummel the other party and they are recovering at a rate that could already be considered quite rapid. I’m not about to explain the psychology behind the MC’s actions. I don’t have that much time. If you want to know, go look it up yourself. Cons (what needs fixing) > Grammar. Haha, I’m not really sure how many times I have said this in a review but it is definitely allot. Accurate use of grammar is necessary in order for a reader to be able to interpret certain sentences correctly. In particular, the inaccurate use of commas is an issue in this novel as I have occasionally found it hard to determine sentence breaks if I’m just chill reading. How can this be fixed? Easy. Just read the sentence to yourself slowly and, wherever you notice there is a natural pause, place a comma. Just take note of where I leave my commas in this review if an example is necessary. Leave a comment, author, if you need further elaboration. > Munted sentences. Thankfully, these are few and far between. In fact, I have not come across any in recent chapters. Basically, these are sentences which can be difficult to interpret or can be interpreted in more than just a couple of ways. They often occur when writers get into their “zone” and start just writing whatever comes to mind then forget to proof read. As an editor, I have seen my fair share of munted sentences and can fix them in my head quickly but it may be more difficult for lighter readers. As I already said though, they mostly don’t exist in the most recent chapters, which is great! Grey area (what doesn’t classify as particularly good nor necessarily need fixing) > Technicalities and science. I realise that this isn’t a major focus of the novel (it is fantasy afterall) but, as a man of science, I feel compelled to address the author’s use of… “speed of light” travel. *Gasp* *horror* That’s right, I said it! So, the problem with travelling at the speed of light is twofold. First, the connotations of travelling at such speeds, and second, but a bit less importantly, the ability to actually see at such speeds. I’ll dumb it down allot so, if you want more details, leave a comment with the question you want answered. - First issue. It is common knowledge that travelling at the speed of light is impossible thanks to special relativity- “But Wolf, there is magic in this worl-“ Hold ya horses, I’m not done yet. Assuming that you were able to achieve such a speed through some unnatural means like magic, an event known as matter warping will occur. You ever ask why scientists can only propel fundamental particles near the speed of light? Yeah? This is why (also energy requirement but that’s besides the point). Basically, when an object speeds up, it gets hotter due to the latent energy contained within the object. We don’t notice this as humans because we are not moving nearly fast enough for this to be realised. Well, when an object travels fast enough, the heat in the object will be enough to destabilise the particles atomic structure and it will split down into its fundamental particles. “But Wolf, that’s why they use a shiel-“ I’m afraid that protection against forces causing friction won’t help you here. Same as g-forces, a shield won’t be able to protect you because It is based solely on how fast you are traveling, not what you are traveling through. So, I’m now happy to reveal to all the readers and author that, congratulations, the moment the MC achieved “speed of light” travel, they were disintegrated into their fundamental particles, but there is a workaround. - Second issue. Assuming that the above isn’t an issue (I’ll describe how to get around it momentarily), the MC would most certainly NOT be able to see while traveling at such speeds, at least, not without the help of magic to scan the area. Neglecting the fact that your brain definitely cannot calculate that fast, traveling at the speed of light means, well, there ain’t no light reaching your eyes, at least, not in the way you want it to. This is more a hypothetical thing as no one has ever travelled anywhere near the speed of light, but you would likely see an array of colours in the form of streaks zipping past at ludicrous speeds relative to you. Definitely no discernible images. It would look something like the lightspeed jumps common in space simulators like Hellion, Elite Dangerous or Star Citizen. Actually, maybe not Elite Dangerous as that is a bit different. So, what is the workaround? Easy. Just a simple two words, ‘spatial manipulation’. The last part of this review is directed more towards the author in case they want to delve more into a science explanation later on in the novel, as such, I will change my vocabulary to make it seem as though I am having a conversation with them. The advantage that you have in this novel is that you haven’t really defined any laws for how the mana itself actually works and, that means, you don’t have to worry about altering past chapters (not that I expect you to anyway). Because the MC’s magic works off of imagination, it means that the mana just has to work around the laws while still upholding the MC’s will. It might seem as though the MC is being accelerated to “c” (speed of light) but this is not necessarily the case. So long as the MC’s will is done, it doesn’t matter how the mana goes about it. Spatial manipulation is the key here. What the mana is actually doing is enclosing the MC (and their pet) in a sealed spatial plane/subdimension, (a bubble if you will) which is imposed on the actual plane, and then accelerating the ENTIRE subdimension to the speed of light by shrinking space in front and lengthening space behind causing a wormhole effect. That way ‘space’ is what is taking the effect of lightspeed travel rather than the entities within said space. Since you would be using the wormhole effect, a shield would not even be necessary as the MC is not physically traveling at lightspeed, their temporary subdimension is. Using this theory, you would be able to even exceed lightspeed. Would this still cause nausea, my oath it would, so you don’t have to worry about removing the MC’s pet’s reaction. Keep in mind that this does not fix the second issue. The MC would still need to use magic to see. Final thoughts Well, there you have it! The good, the “needs fixing” and the in-between. Do I recommend this novel? Abso-f*cking-lutely! Just don’t click on this novel expecting romance (not at the current releases anyway) or an MC who stomps on everyone who is in their way. If that’s what you want, this novel is not for you. But the reader is their own best critic. Still not sure? Give it a go. There is only one way to find out if you will like it or not. It's a shame I could not give this novel a solid 5 stars (as I would like to) but the mistakes brought it down to 4.6 (I'm being impartial remember). As I’ve already said, if anyone has any questions or problems with my review, leave a comment and I will answer if I can. …1590 words later… Holy sh!t I need to find a better way to spend my time other than writing essays on how an author is going on their work. Don’t ever tell me that I don’t support the authors that I read from.

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Quick Transmigration: Goddess Of My Imagination

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YuuZu
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Awh~ I'm so touched by your review essay. 😊 Thank you for reading, your opinion, and your suggestions. 🤗

Greyblood
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Wolf I like reading your comments because you find pros and cons. I have read all of your comments from other novels and I really like them. But I am also a man of science so I read your comment and totally agree about travelling at the speed of light but I don't agree about wormhole. Because if MC is on a planet than take earth as an example. Earth travel through the space at 30km/s speed so if MC use wormhole for a second than MC will be 30km from where he wants to go and I almost forgot about that earth is also spinning. So if MC want to use wormhole than MC have to be able to calculate all the things that I have said above. Well wolf I have said what I want to say now I am going to read this novel and love your thoughts about other novels. I have seen the novel you are translating and I will read it after it have little more chapters. I almost forgot to tell you that I don't write and translate novels and English is not my main language. So if you find any mistakes just ignore them. That's all I want to say .If you have something to say you can write down in comments section and bye.

Wulvenclave
WulvenclaveLv12Wulvenclave

Oh? I think you misunderstood. I described the transit as a "wormhole effect" not an actual wormhole. Space would be collapsing and reshaping itself similar to what a wormhole would do, hence the futile attempt at simplifying the science. Sorry if there was a misunderstanding. If anything else needs clarifying or if you still believe I have described something poorly, leave another comment. Also. just a quick mention on the fact that I'm not trying to be rude in my previous statements. I reread it and realised that it was quite blunt in such away that it could be interpretted as being offensive. I also want to state that you are absolutely right in your analysis of a wormhole in reality and such a thing could not be normally used on planets. This can also be linked to a real-life analysis of pop-culture teleportation as it doesn't take into account the earth's rotation. It would be highly embarrassing, as a superhero, to be taken out by a flagpole moving at mach 1.3 because you didn't factor in the earth's spin during a teleport. 'Tis a highly amusing situation but I'm just a sadistic f*ck. Btw, I'm not actually translating a novel. I'm editing for the author. Semantics, I know, but I just thought I would point it out. Anyways, have a good evening!

Greyblood:Wolf I like reading your comments because you find pros and cons. I have read all of your comments from other novels and I really like them. But I am also a man of science so I read your comment and totally agree about travelling at the speed of light but I don't agree about wormhole. Because if MC is on a planet than take earth as an example. Earth travel through the space at 30km/s speed so if MC use wormhole for a second than MC will be 30km from where he wants to go and I almost forgot about that earth is also spinning. So if MC want to use wormhole than MC have to be able to calculate all the things that I have said above. Well wolf I have said what I want to say now I am going to read this novel and love your thoughts about other novels. I have seen the novel you are translating and I will read it after it have little more chapters. I almost forgot to tell you that I don't write and translate novels and English is not my main language. So if you find any mistakes just ignore them. That's all I want to say .If you have something to say you can write down in comments section and bye.
_K0S_
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Thanks for the heads up:) But wow that is the longest review I've ever seen in this platform lol.

Mutedlight
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i love your review

AGG8
AGG8Lv15AGG8

I felt like I was back in the classroom, only the class was a mash up of science and language arts. Your explanations and examples were pretty spot on and easy to understand.I feel like you would make an excellent teacher. All in all I just really liked your review.😁

Wulvenclave
WulvenclaveLv12Wulvenclave

Thanks, but I can't deal with anymore then one or two students at once, lol, too much of a headache. I'm glad you appreciated the review. It's not my best work since I was paraphrasing massively (we would be looking closer to 3000 and that's just scratching the surface), but it was a work nonetheless. Cheers.

AGG8:I felt like I was back in the classroom, only the class was a mash up of science and language arts. Your explanations and examples were pretty spot on and easy to understand.I feel like you would make an excellent teacher. All in all I just really liked your review.😁
Dortexus
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Bro it's called a review for a reason XD, that's not a review anymore more like an essay X)

Winzentwinni
WinzentwinniLv15Winzentwinni

Thank you for the excellent review. Your honest, impartial and straightforward pro and con list was really refreshing to read and your "rant"/explanation about the "speed of light" was kind of funny (in a good way). I like how passionate you seem about this. Also I appreciate the time you took to write this detailed review which in the end evoked in me the urge to read this novel. Thank you also for pointing out the state of the grammar. I know that many people can't cope with a few mistakes for different reasons (non native speakers, people who expect the quality of a print book etc). I don't mind it but it's still good to hear it getting better later on.