Review Detail of MS_Chavez in Last Avatar

This is a very intriguing story, and I rather like the world building. I haven’t read a lot of work with Hinduism as the basis to the fantasy world, and this one is written in such a way that I didn’t feel out of my depth despite knowing relatively little about the mythology. The main character, Xed is amusingly arrogant and definitely makes the story an interesting read. There are a number of errors in the writing, mostly punctuation and tense shifts, and then a switch from third person to first person. Most of it I think is just due to the fact that it is a first draft. After the story gets further along and the writer gets a better handle on what they’re trying to do and how to write this story, I think most the issues that stick out me can be fixed with a good editor and some revisions. I suspect English isn’t their first language, and if that’s the case, then I’m even more impressed by the quality and lack of significant errors. It’s an interesting read for sure, and I hope to see more updates. It will be even better with a little polish.